The Girl In The Blue Dress

Hey... This is my first story so please forgive me if it is bad! Also if you like this then follow and ill read your books. I love reading! Also if you like my book and maybe you want to have your name in my book just comment your name and poof... It will be in this book. Somewhere! Now to the story...

I was laying in my bed. I looked over at my nightstand and saw the time was 11:46 pm. CRAP! I need to get sleep soon or tommorow will be tragic at school! I layed down and shut my eyes waiting for sleep to devour me whole. My two cats Perry and Neptune were beside me on both sides sleeping. Perry on my left and Neptune in my right. I felt sleep getting into my system. Suddenly I was in the garage. The light blinding through the window. I squinted as someone I never recognized ushered me to open the box in front of me. I felt like I knew this girl, so I opened the box. Inside was I piece of paper that said, "SUPRISE!" I looked up at her with a confused look on my face. She then threw me a evil grin and threw the knife at me hitting me in the throat. Then I heard a faint beeping, as it got louder i felt my life slipping away. And all of a sudden i was awoken by my father. "Time to get up for school." "Oh great! Another day of highschool."

Is it okay, I mean its going to get scary but I've never written a book before... Please comment any opinions for the future of my story, vote if you like, comment your name if you want to be one if my friends that get killed by the girl in the blue dress!!! (.0.) ahh I'm standing in my head!!!