OK. Uh, it's Lillian. This is going to be a somewhat longer review,
because i actually wrote down what i thought was wrong! This girl? Needs improvements. I'm scared to read the sequel. Just Ugh.
First of all. The thing that bothered me the most. No Plot What So Ever. That's ONE way to make me want to throw a book (Computer in this case) at a damn wall. I mean, honestly, it just revolved around freaking Kyle and Greg. I mean COME ON LADY! Get some action in there! A gang! School Bully! Suicide! CANCER EVEN.
Secondly, You know what bothered me about the punctuation marks? Too many explanation points. Or whatever (!!!) Is. Obviously, i'm bad at names for puncuation.
Thirdly, not many spelling errors, but you probably spelled check but, i mean honestly, read it over so you don't mix words up!
Fourth, Too many fillers, Or well they sounded like fillers considering they were a PAGE LONG. Another thing to get me annoyed. Did you KNOW, that you can save it as a draft!? AND LATER CONTINUE WRITING? You didn't did you? Well Know You Do. Use It.
Fifth, 19 effing capters of 1-2 pages. Hor-ri-ble. Again, draft button! JUST CLICK 'SAVE'.
Sixth, (Have you noticed, that i've never wrote six mistakes in a story? well theres a few after this one too.) You're cliff hangers? Made Me Want To Barf. You apoligized for one, that cliff hanger made me want to STOP READING. COMPLETELY. Ugh, i'm getting frustrated just WRITING the REVIEW, imagine me READING THE BOOK. I was pissy. You do not want to be around me when i'm reading an absolute horrible book, alright? Consider your self warned.
Seventh, (Just, No. So many Mistakes) This, Made, Me, Mentally, SCREAM. :) :) ;) :) xD :) <- do you know they don't use those in books? Unless they saying a text message or email? YOU USED THEM IN THE STORY. I couldn't scream outloud but i did groan quietly considering it's 2 in the morning. I have a monster in the fridge so i'll be OK at school.
Eighth, (Dear God, Take off the story now) Tiffany. You could have atleast, used her in the first book. I mean honestly, you're kidding right? Perfectly good starting point. You made me want to die, including it in the SECOND? You need ACTION, in the FIRST, not this lame 'Kyle & Greg' shit. Look at me, i'm cursing. I never curse! You brought the bad side out!
Rating: 4. NOT REALLY. That would be me pitying her.
Real Rating: 1 1/2.
That's sad.
Not Lovely,
Lillian.
P.S. Please recommend A GOOD BOOK, THAT DOESN'T INVOLVE NO PLOT.
P.P.S. I probably will not read the Sequel. Sooo, Don't request it. Just. Don't.
P.P.P.S I'm writing a story, and guess what!? I had to stop in the middle of the first chapter, guess what i used!! 'SAVE' I DRAFTED IT! CAN YOU BELIEVE IT! Something this damn lady needs to learn how to use.
P.P.P.P.S. Told you it would be long, my dear lovelys.
