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TITLE
Such a pretty poetic aesthetic title. Definitely rings a thousand bells of romance in the air. It doesn't sound like a redundant title or something too cliche either. It's perfect!
BLURB
That was a pretty charming summary of the book with no spoilers. Though, I still feel it can be polished a little bit more ♥.
In the third line of the summary, the word 'but' is repeated twice. Conjunctions like that are definitely strong words. A reader would come across a book while scrolling and immediately look at the blurb which comes in those rectangular shaped boxes. Omitting words that can be taken off and keeping the rest of the things will definitely allow readers more access to the next few words as well.
There is a dialogue between Emily and Warren in the blurb as well. A dialogue that indicates that everything is okay. One of the most important jobs for the blurb is to lure the readers in. And sometimes, luring can be done when the author puts a plot twist in it. Try using dialogues from the first chapter because they are definitely hooking. Show the reader that the story isn't all peace and harmony.
COVER
I honestly love the choice of picture for the story. I think it's beautiful! The fonts seem perfect. My only concern would be the word 'infinity' which is right in front of the staircase. Maybe bringing it a little bit lower might allow the reader to gain full peace of looking at the cover without any obstructions. Making the colour of the word 'infinity' from the given colour to the neon version of it might also reflect on the cover against the dark shadows. Also, the author's name is usually in full caps.
PLOT
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It was absolutely amazing. I literally had nothing to nitpick at or even give constructive criticism because I think it's fabulous. I noticed that there were only seven chapters in the book and it's marked complete. I am a sucker for stories that have very few chapters because sometimes I got no patience at all xD.
But I did find some errors in this one sentence.
However, it didn't last long because ss soon as they both reached to the ground floor, a man in grey uniform walked up to them.
I am sure that was just a type error, but the ss should be edited to 'as'.
They both reached the ground floor. The word 'to' should be omitted.
I really love how the action and drama began in the first chapter itself. It burnt brightly under the romance genre. The characters were alive. It wasn't just dialogues. There were moving and had actions that followed with the words they spoke. The showing vs telling definitely works best in this book.
OVERALL
This is a well-polished book. The way you were able to bring out both the character's frustrations was incredible. Readers would definitely have a hard time figuring out whom to side with. You should definitely try publishing your books because your writing style is unique and quite frankly, very beautiful.
