[P.E.T AWARDS 2023] - || CLOSED || Kpop awards

-BEST ANTAGONIST || RESULTS-

Note from the host : Very, very well done to everyone who participated in this category, all of the books are excellent in their own ways. But, please do remember to thank your amazing judge, WhatAtinyWorld for the very in-depth reviews, and their dedication to being a judge.

Judge: WhatATinyWorld

Final Lineup:

1. Detective Jeon - tbr_tales

2. That Joseon Rain - IR3NIC

3. Occultar - bangtanrewinds

4. The Nightmare Curse - TangerinesOfSuga

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Reviews:

The Nightmare Curse (TXT) - @TangerinesOfSuga

Antagonist: 3/10

First impression: 8/10

Allurement: 4/10

Grammar: 4/10

Writing style: 5/10

Overall enjoyment: 6/10

Final: 31/60

The dictionary definition of antagonist is "a person who actively opposes..." but I believe many writers will agree that an antagonist may also be a group or a non-personable force. In your story, you have two antagonists: Akuji and the Curse itself.

Individuality and relatability of antagonists:

Akuji - 0/10

Curse - 8/10

For Akuji, she's not in the story much yet, so I don't have a ton to go on. She doesn't have a reason to hate anyone other than Yeonjun. Is she just a sadistic kid? I don't understand her motive(s). For the curse, I love this idea. I know you said it's from a movie, but I've never seen something like it before! I don't have a backstory, though. Where does the curse originate? How did Akuji find it?

The suspense and the way you've written the nightmares is well done. I was pulled in and on edge multiple times. The grammar, unfortunately, pulled me out of that. There's some missing commas as well as incorrect past tenses, capitalizations, and apostrophes.

Your storyline/plot is good. Where you lack, these are things you can easily learn and improve. I highly recommend you try to vary your sentence length and structure. The flow of sentences is what can make your stories stand out! I think English isn't your first language? I know the grammar can be confusing.

Occultar • KTH @bangtanrewinds

Antagonist: 7/10

First impression: 8/10

Allurement: 4/10

Grammar: 2/10

Writing style: 8/10

Overall enjoyment: 5/10

Final: 34/60

It's difficult to give a true score since the story isn't over. I still have quite a lot to understand.

Taehyung and Yongsun are intelligent. This is key for a good antagonist. They hide things from Elle and are able to manipulate her. We haven't seen a lot from Yongsun yet, but with Taehyung, I really appreciated how he can switch between sinister and cruel to immediately soft and gentle in order to control Elle. A little bit of gaslighting, it seems.