✒️𝗦𝗲𝗽𝘁𝗲𝗺𝗯𝗲𝗿 𝗪𝗿𝗶𝘁𝗶𝗻𝗴 𝗖𝗵𝗮𝗹𝗹𝗲𝗻𝗴𝗲 - 𝗢𝗙𝗙𝗜𝗖𝗜𝗔𝗟 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥𝗦!
Congratulations to all the winners of my 2024 September Writing Challenge!
You all wrote amazing stories in such a limited time! It was difficult to choose be...
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Relevance to the Prompt: Prompt #4 | where an unexpected friendship blossoms between two rivals. Erian, the story's protagonist, is an academic competitor who feels immense pressure from her mother to win at all costs. Her rivalry with Rance, another contestant, eventually leads to an unexpected bond, particularly when she faces defeat.
Writing Quality: The writing is clear and fluid, with natural dialogue that captures the tension between Erian and Rance, as well as their evolving dynamic. The writer uses internal monologue effectively to express Erian's frustrations, anger, and eventual softening. The pacing is consistent, and the story fits well within the word count without feeling rushed. However, more vivid descriptions of the setting and emotions could have added an extra layer of depth to the narrative.
Creativity: The story takes a common theme of rivalry and competition but adds a unique emotional touch by focusing on the protagonist's personal battle with her high standards, parental pressure, and the unexpected compassion shown by her rival. The twist of Rance offering support, despite Erian's sharp words, brings an interesting angle to the story, emphasizing empathy over competition.
Overall Lesson: The main lesson in the story is learning how to accept defeat and realizing that the true value of competition lies in the experience, not just in the victory. It also teaches the importance of humility, kindness, and how even rivals can become friends through empathy and shared challenges.
Rating: 4 Stars |The story is well-written, relatable, and heartfelt, with strong character development and a positive message about accepting one's limitations and opening up to others. The writer successfully captures the emotional nuances of competition and friendship, delivering a satisfying conclusion with the blossoming of a new friendship.
