Reviewed by: CarolKnox2
Book Title: What's in a name?
Author's Name: Uditasree
CHAPTER 1: YOUR NAME
Introduction
Strengths:
- The chapter starts with an engaging scene that captures the reader's attention immediately:
- Example: "'Idiot!' 'Lucky and Abhay! Stop fighting!' Yelled Phalguni, their music teacher and Lucky's aunt."
- The introduction of characters through dialogue and actions gives a vivid impression of their personalities.
Room for Improvement:
- Consider providing a bit more background information about the main characters early on to help readers connect with them more quickly.
Setting and Atmosphere
Strengths:
- The description of the terrace, the mango tree, and the music sets a peaceful and culturally rich scene:
- Example: "Sun rays radiated throughout the terrace, illuminating the newly ripened mangoes from the age-old mango tree."
- The sensory details, like the smell of the filter coffee, add to the immersive experience:
- Example: "The smell of the freshly brewed filter coffee hit Aravind's nostrils as he enjoyed every sip."
Room for Improvement:
- Perhaps more details about the overall setting (e.g., the neighborhood or the house) could enhance the reader's visualization of the environment.
Character Development
Strengths:
- The characters' relationships are clearly depicted through their interactions:
- Example: "'Thataya!!!' She sang as she handed the box to him. 'Lucky! Done with your music class?' Enquired Aravind, keeping the newspaper aside. 'Done Thataya!' Replied Lucky, giving him a known smile."
- The contrast between Phalguni's nervousness and Akash's politeness creates an interesting dynamic:
- Example: "'Hello, Ms. Phalguni,' he politely greeted her. Phalguni returned his greetings with a nervous smile."
Room for Improvement:
- Some characters, like Lucky and her parents, could benefit from more depth in their descriptions and motivations.
Plot Development
Strengths:
- The chapter maintains a good pace, balancing daily routines with the anticipation of Phalguni's matchmaking meeting:
- Example: "Bhadravati hurriedly went to call her daughter down to get ready as today's her Pelli choopulu."
- The twist of Phalguni rejecting Akash because of his name is unexpected and intriguing:
- Example: "'Your name,' replied Phalguni as she glanced at Akash, afraid of his reaction."
Room for Improvement:
- The transition from the peaceful morning to the matchmaking scene could be smoother to maintain the narrative flow.
Dialogue
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