a colletion of poems

here is a collection of my poems i am writing for a school competion. comment and say which is your favourite please and thanks. :) 

the only rule is that it has to start with évery breath'

so here they are...

1st attempt 

Every breath i take, i die a little inside, 

Every breath i take, i draw closer to my last, 

Every breath i take, i hope not to have lied, 

Every breath i take, my life goes before me fast 

Every breath i take, i hope it not to be my last.

2nd attempt 

Every breath you take, i want you even more,  

Every breath you take, i see you look the other way, 

Every breath you take, i see your name in my mind, those single letters,  

Every breath you take, i wonder will you ever notice me?

Those were my first two, and they sorta rhyme, every second line.

3rd attempt 

Every breath, i hope to have you by my side,  

for when i take my last, you can't follow me to an enlightened place.

When i see the light, after my last,  

I hope to see my life before me,  

So i can reminise the times we spent together  

Although it may be some time, it will come, 

I hope it comes before yours,  

For i could not bear to see you in pain.

Every breath i take, i come closer to my last, 

when i'm gone, i shall follow the light an dbe in bliss, 

but i never forget the time you were by my side.

and some more too...  

Every breathe I take, I look the other way, 

For i know you will never see me, and never meet my glance.  

I makes me sad on the inside, and i come closer to crying,  

I come closer to seeing the blood run down my wrist.  

But i never give up hope because i know i will find the one who will suit me fine  

It may be a time before i find the one, but i know he will come.  

In the mean time, I need to find something to keep my spirits up So that i dont end my time before i was ment to.  

Although i dont know my purpose yet, i hope to find it soon, so i know what every breathe means.

Every breathe i take, i see poeple doing wrong, thinking it is right.  

Every step, i take i see the world crumbling behind me, so i can never remember my past. 

Every hour i take, i watch the clock, counting how long is have left, 

Every thing i take, i hope it not to be my last, but when my last breathe appers, and i feel a cold hand on my shoulder, i will follow for i have no choice. .

Every hand i feel, i hope god put them ther to encourge and not dispize me.  

Every emotion i feel, i try to push it down, for i never want to feel pain or sorrow ever again.  

Every i feel, (i dont know what else i can feel? advice) 

Every thing i feel, has ups and downs, like a roller coaster, but i must enjoy the ride, because i can never have it again.

Every memory i have, is just a flash back of the worst, but i must find good in them  

Every posetion i have, i am thankful for, i am glad i have and not have to treck miles for. 

Every friend i have, i hope they treat me well, for i treat them the way i would appreciate.  

Every thing i have, is great, but sometimes its hard to find it, because it is filled with hatred and anger. But out of all that life has taught me, is to never give up hope, even if i find it in my last moments, i found it, every breath helped me get there.

Every breath, i get closer to loseing all faith in life.  

All of my faith in you, her and him.  

My lover, my Mum and my Dad  

I come closer to impaling my wrist on a knife,  

Every breath, i remeber that my time has not come, so why should i make it.  

I will wait for a lifless hand to touch my shoulder before giving up.  

I may wish for it to come quicker, but in the end, i dont  

For when my time comes, i will wish for it to leave.

So what do you think? 

i will probably add more, coz i have about 2 weeks to go, so i will keep adding. 

:) 

comment me, your favourite, advice or any mistake, ( i know there will be many mistakes, so say it nicely to me please.) 

Please and thanks,  

from starpop00 :P