inhuman (Emo× Alien)

chapter 1

This is my first book so I would like so feed back to make it better.

Help! Help me! PLEASE!!! I-I CANT BREATH!! PLEASE!!!PLEASE HELP!!!! "Mark... Mark! Wake up. It's just a dream." Mark sits up and begins to cry. "Mom it was the same dream." Mark's mom hugs and kisses her. "Come on it's time to get dressed for school." Marks mother leaves and shuts the door. Mark gets up begins to look for something to wear.  She just ends up wearing a random shirt and some ripped jeans that were hanging by a thread. "Come on M it's time to go." She grads her backpack and her favorite beanie and goes down stairs to get an apple and walks out the door. Like any other morning there was 15 minutes of motivational speaking for Mark. Now and then she'd just tune it out and listen to some music. They had finally reach their destination that was pretty much hell for Mark. Mark sighs and gets out of the car. ''Bye Mark'' Mark waves and keeps her head down. She walks past the preppy cheerleaders and the dumb jocks. She finally gets to her friend danny who greets her with the biggest hug. Danny and Mark were best friends since pre-k. They talk over some Starbucks as they walk into school. Danny leaves to go to talk to his councilor. They hug and part their ways. Mark walks down the hallway and gets shoved into a locker by Audrey the head cheerleader. She attempts to hit Mark but someone jumped in front of mark and takes the hit with no emotion.  Audrey begins to throw a temper tantrum and starts yelling. "WHO THE HELL ARE YOU?! DO YOU KNOW WHO I AM!!" A soft voice calls out to Mark to make sure she's ok . She nods and their eyes meet and she notices that his eyes had changed from blue to a very bright green.  She get startled and holds her head down.

Alrighty guys that the first part tell me what you think please and I'm open to suggestions ✌✌