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I watched as a gloomy figure filled my eyes.
Since it was pitch dark I couldn't see his figure but he was
Coming close.Closer.
I was alone......scared.........shaking
His feet thumped the ground.
I knew who he was instantly.
He was a............l
Before I could even speak or shout he quickly
Clamped my mouth with something wet in a handkerchief.
Whatever it was,would do harm.
He clasped it near to my mouth demanding that I stay calm.
How could I stay calm?
I started to kick outwards but my legs felt like bouncy springs.I felt
a dart of anger bubbling in me.I started to panic
He wasn't giving up easily.Iscreamed once more in the dreary blackness 'let go' but it was a mild
muffle.
Without a warning my legs started to wobble,shake and jitter.My hands fell as though they weighed
thousands of grams.
Then he spoke 'I've got you' in such a snarly voice.
I was totally helpless.My eyes started to slowly close.This was the worst of it.
I tried to burst my eyelids open as long as I could,however.....
he put his big,monkey hand over my eyelids and shut them up.I collapsed without hitting the ground.
His hands caught me.
I felt myself being bundled away.
Away to a place that I didn't know.
............
I woke up groggily in a room filled with a bad stench of blood that seethed around my nostrils.
My vision started to clear up.I felt icy and chills rising up my arms.Goosebumps?
Where was i?
There was an operating blazing light above my head that laughed hysterically"ha ha ha' repeatedly.
I was in total shock.
I wanted to scream but my body was just registering where I was.
Desperately I wanted to doze off to a world with astounding joy,without any distress.
But what could I do?They had caught me.The watches I call them.
Well when I was young my parents best friend,a secret scientist had discovered that I had a gene inside me that multiplied the DNA information.This DNA was the rare rest of all.It could treat any illness that you want to discard.Hay fever,cancer,liver damage you name it.
Experiments were carried out on me and to was true that I was special.That I had to be hidden like a multi millionaire gem.
However it didn't happen that way.The watches had one day gate crashed through the heavy ,charged electric doors where the scientist used to live and had bribed him with the most glimmering jewels that you would inclusive.y faint.They sparkled,bounced in one's eyes and they cost a fortune.At first the humble scientist started to disregard the offer,nevertheless the watches out numbered him fair and square,wrapping tight strand of rope around the scientist's neck.He started to choke...............panic.They demanded the scientist where the gene host lived(me) and what was so special about the gene.He told everything to them.Damn!
The watches went away with the juices of pride.They didn't even free the rope from the scientists's neck.Death wheezed around the scientists ranging from fear to turmoil.His eyes closed freakishly jammed with red bloodshot anger in his eyes.Why did he let this happen?without any instinct of warning his head had lopsided into an uncomfortable arch.Eyes didn't close.He smelled his own flesh decomposing with the help of the fiery light coming out of the most disobedient window you have ever seen.He was dead.Rest in peace.
..........
The surgeon had put something up into the light.Igasped croakily.A needle!
I started to toss and turn on the bed without even being successful .'Guys be quick!'.The urgent command manoeuvred the operating staff to swiftly come and do you know what they did next?About 18 of the staff members had got hold of one part of my fragile body and had started to wound durable leather straps around my ankles,hands,thighs,and waist.They had got me.
I couldn't believe what they were going to do with me.The shock was immense.
Before I could scream similar to a hummingbird two things happened at once.A needle went into my subtle flesh and then a small handkerchief slopped with what smelt like chloroform was hung near to my mouth.Already my body felt sleepy from the injection that they had given me right now but I didn't want to fully be in their control so I held my breath.At least it would be alright to die in this way as I was the culprit to my own death.I wasn't being selfish ,even though I knew my gene would save the life of everybody's but what about my sacred life?Am I a lab rat that could be kicked around?No I am a human too!I have freedom to what I want to do just like everyone else!
I still held my breath.'Don't gasp for air'i whispered to myself'Just then someone amongst the staff pinched my calf.It pained like mad.I screamed a dreary bloodcurdling scream that made me take the potion of chloroform in.My eyes started to sink into their sockets.Adrenaline flooded my inner soul ready to fight,yet I couldn't.Tears started to automatically roll down my face feeling sorry that my heart was going to be ripped apart in order to take the crazy gene out of me.I was helpless.The surplus energy from my body was drained away.My eyes closed.The world spun around.What I heard next was a surgeon's saw cutting my flesh.The pain was too much.I was not going to survive and I was right.I did not survive at all but was i sure?
