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'The Billionaire's Unauthentic Daughter ' is an ongoing romance story by m_a_bookworm, that is in the P.O.V of Julie James, an unpopular high school girl who lives on her own and takes care of herself.
Positives: The concept of this story was fascinating, and the Main Character's inner monolog was comical and sure to keep a reader entertained.
Negatives: The characters were cliche, the dialogue was forced and a bit unrealistic.
Grammar/Punctuation: Punctuation was used well, although needed a bit of polishing. The grammar usually made sense but the author sometimes switched from past tense to present tense, which was slightly confusing.
Characters: The characters felt a little overused and cliche, like the author had chosen them from a stock collection. They were not the most original cast. We had the party going best friend, nerdy/sarcastic/supermodel-but-doesn't-think-she's-a-supermodel Main Char, basic bitch rival, so on and so forth.
Dialogue: Made sense and drove the plot, but most of the things that were said (specifically during arguments) would never have been spoken to one another and were quite forced.
Authors voice: the author's voice was consistent and amusing throughout the book and typically made sense.
Other: I felt the whole vibe of the Main character not having any friends at school a bit unrealistic. I could see her not being super popular, but it felt a little odd that she and Olivia were the only nice ones in the ENTIRE school. For some reason this makes her seem shallow as the only girls she tried to be friends with were the catty/popular/gossipy ones.
