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A. OPENING
Strong. That's my first impression after reading both the prologue and the first chapter.
Any writer worth his salt knows how hard it is to engage a reader with a captivating start, let alone two. Yet this author had managed to do just that - hook my attention in both openings.
Strengths
➡Tension-filled
➡Conflict ridden
➡En pointe delivery of dialogue
➡Show aspect of writing is evident
➡Beautifully crafted sentences
Weaknesses
➡Confusing dialogue format
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Rule: If the speaker performs actions linked to the dialogue, keep everything in the same paragraph. The readers won't easily lose track which character is speaking if it's all in the same paragraph.
