Author: Daniasha R.
Critics: Dcmuch
Genre: Teen Fiction
Target Reader: 12+
I have been loving you
Original plot: Dahil iniwan si Dianne ng ex-boyfriend niyang si Jhay sa hindi malamang dahilan. Nasaktan siya at nagkaroon ng hesitation na magmahal muli. May bagong darating sa kanya, makakaya niya kayang magmahal muli o bibigyan ng second chance si old lover.
What I understood upon reading Chapter 1-14?
Dianne represented their school as a Lawn Tennis player. And because of that, she met Nathan (One of her crush). Dahil sa angking ganda niya, hind iyon nakatakas kay Nathan. And on long processed – he court her.
Did you noticed the difference? I didn't mention the word hesitation on the second summary. Buong chapter, hindi ko nakitaan ang pag-aalangan kay Dianne.
Syntax error na agad sa plot plus the character internal conflict
Okay, let's scrub each error.
1. Introduction – Sadly, first chapter palang gusto ko nang mag-back out. Why? See this paragraph: