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A. COVER/ TITLE/ BLURB
Cover
I don't usually critique book cover simply because I don't have an eye for artistry. Since this is a special request from the author, Eiramana, I'm happy to oblige. Pambawi dahil late na 'tong evaluation ko.
The new cover is way better than the first. Font is readable, design is simple and the colours do not clash. Plus, the image relates to the content of the story.
There's only one concern I want to point out. You know how the narrator always raves about the protagonist's looks? Ang impression ko based na rin sa description, maganda na may maamong mukha. For me, I'd say that the woman in the cover while definitely striking isn't beautiful in a conventional notion. She's what people call handsome.
Side comment: If I'm not mistaken, she's the main cast in the TV series Rizolli and Isles which is based on the novels by Tess Gerritsen, one of my favourite authors. Plano kong bumili ng DVD niyan.
Title
I agree with dcmuch when she suggested the term 'dark' in the title. Mas may impact nga, but I have a little misgiving about the whole title. Ba't parang naging tunog drama? Regret pero bukod sa confident 'yong tindig ng babae, nakangiti pa. Notice the inconsistency?
Blurb
It's awkward because of the mixed construction of sentences. I think this happens when we try to squeeze several thoughts in one sentence.
Walang rule na kailangang dalawang sentence lang ang blurb, so expound it para mas luminaw 'yong mensahe na gustong iparating sa readers.
It may help if there is a briefly description of the main protagonist.
B. OPENING
It certainly captured my attention. The scenes which unfold in the first chapter didn't dawdle, but will this be enough to keep your readers engaged in your story?
