The seven sins and the demon lord

Book one

Hey guys so it would be great if you could read my story and tell me how you feel about it and what you like and dislike thanks a bunch also your boi has pretty bad dyslexia so if a sentence or word looks bad just leave a comment or something and I'll fix it

Damion was the center of the bullies rage but all the girls liked him for his kind sweet nature. as he got older he always heard voices in his head at first they were normal but then one day he fell asleep and woke up in a sticky situation but he could achieve his dream with this power

Explanations: damion is becoming the next "devil" but in order to succeed the current demon lord he need to get the favor of the 7 deadly sins the devil's greatest advisors. The pentagram on his hand is what makes him strong and show the sins he's acquired easer  lust(circle),wrath(bottom point),envy(bottom left corner),gluttny(top left) ,pride(center),sloth(right bottom,greed(right top)
Also as you'll soon learn this story the story is split up into a traditional story and a Journal entry for what sin he's dealing with in his dream as dreams play a key role

11/27/16 Day 1 LUST
When i went to sleep last night i had a dream of all the girls in my school that i thought were cute they were all ... naked and doing things to each other when a older woman 20-23 came up to me and asked if i wanted to join them before i could even think i was with all the girls i had no choice in what i did. i couldn't control it i woke up dazed and uncomfortable i felt conflicted about my dream it's something i wouldn't normally do or think about so why would i do that.

He was confused but he knew that he had to get ready for school and that he could not be late for class he was in such a rush that he did not notice the ring that had formed on his hand it was big and cut into his skin around the flesh but he did not feel the searing pain that he would normally feel. when he got to class he was greeted by a few of his friends that were girls most of them were his friend because they felt bad for him but some of them were his genuine friends. one of them was his childhood friend Ruby the crazy overachieving cheerleader and the girlfriend to Damions biggest bully Jax. she would make it a point to say hi every day at his locker" hey demon" she teased one of the reasons he was bullied was because in elementary school his teacher would always say his name wrong as demon the kids thought it was funny thats for sure but when she said it it didn't bother him but when he got closer to talk to her he remembered his dream. His hand started to burn but he didn't make notice. he didn't know what to say he stood there looking at her. Her body completely bare he didn't know what to say she waved her hand saying "hey you alive in there looks like you seen a ghost" he snaps out of his daze and notices she is clothed now. The skin around his hand was burning but cooling down. he still didn't give notice to it even though he had to have felt that searing pain. Casually he says "sorry i have a lot on my mind right now" walking past her to the locker behind her she looks surprised at the lack of love she had received from "demon". she asked him what's wrong he replied with a strange look and said "i had a weird dream and you were in it" she smiled and threw her arms around him and said "what was i doing in your dream" he did not have the capacity to lie to her so he told her the truth raw and blunt with an empty look in his eyes. he felt that he wouldn't do that though yes he thought she was very beautiful and had deep passionate feelings about her. "you know you want to" a female voice cut through his thoughts his hand burning again he knew he wanted to he's loved her forever but all she did was treat him like her little brother she looked shocked not knowing how to respond to that he walked away from her and went to class he didn't talk to her after that for the day. He was so tired he fell asleep while doing homework he looked so peaceful and unaware of his future.