Writer Games | Death Wish & 51

Task Seven: The Last Midnight /SF - Voting

Holy shit, guys. If you  could please not make me die of jealousy, that'd be great. But hey, you  guys have trusted me to judge your writing, and, while that feels  impossible, here are the notes on your entries.

District Two, Edgar Phasear - a-k-a-anonymous

Notes: This entry  was most likely the most original I have ever read - which says  something, because I've been hosting Games for three and a half years.  Somehow, you managed to balance not only the quality of your writing  with matching the song that you were assigned, but also the creativity  of your idea. I do, however, think there were times where you might have  gone a bit too far into the drama, something which I think you need to  be very careful about. Still, overall great work.

District Two, Epona Jericho - katniss-everdeen [3]

Notes: The  writing in this entry was, as per your usual standard, brilliant; as far  as your diction and technique goes, there is very little - if anything -  for me to criticize. The link to the song was a great fix and my  favourite thing about the entry - the concept that Epona is certain of  her oncoming death is quite interesting, particularly considering she's  one of the most skilled characters at this point. However, this entry  did seem to be a bit too rambley. While I understand that her thoughts  are circular, there's only a certain amount until it gets tedious.

District Five, Nathaniel Morrison - TheDarkHorse [8]

Notes: Your  writing, as always, was perfectly good. The problem here was, quite  frankly, in the link to the song, something which I found disappointed  considering how fond I was of the song. It was a good idea, it just  didn't seem to fit.

District Nine, Aster Wheatleigh - - theravensdiadem [5]

Notes: Aster was  supposed to be dying at the end. While I see what you did, you did sort  of break the task - though that could be my own fault for not being more  specific. I'm sorry to start on a negative note, but I literally  couldn't find anything else on which to comment, so um yeah. Sorry. Pls  stop making me jealous, thank you.

District Ten, Wesley Redding - EverydayAwkwardness

Notes: The  connection between the song and the entry was probably one of the  strongest there, which is good because it was one of my favourites of  the songs I assigned. Your writing, as always, is great and you have a  very unique style that makes your work very interesting. I have to say,  however, that the entry felt way too short for a semifinal, particularly  considering that it's a fairly long song. It seems somewhat rushed.

District Twelve, Aya Brandley - SilverAndGoldfish [4]

Notes: Pls don't  make me cri like that, thanks. Granted, it fit the entry to a T, and yes  your writing was on point, but like if you could not that'd be great.  The one comment I have, however, is to make sure you weren't rambling;  at some parts it felt like you were just trying to add more for the sake  of making it longer.

And so, after a whole lot of deliberation, I've decided that the byes are going to Aster Wheatleigh [5] and Aya Brandley [4]. Vote (PM) for your two favourites. Voting closes tomorrow at 5 PM BST. You can, as always, vote for yourself.

May the odds be ever in your favour.