Okay, so where to start? My name is Chris and I love to write and this is my first book. I'm not sure how to make this readable while I write it, so any tips would be great. I am open to all criticism and I'm pretty sure I can take it, fire away! lol Any tips on names places or anything would be great, and I'm not sure about the title, and I need a cover but none of these things are why you're here, so on with the story... Chris
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The Entity
By Christopher Ray Pitts
Chapter One:Creation
In the beginning there were four Great Races. The Earth gave them each one of four Weapons of Power. The Weapons all held one of the Elements: Earth, Fire, Water, and Air. The Weapons had the power to create worlds and destroy them as well. The Races were told that fifth was hidden within the Earth herself. She gave them the power to mold our Realm. In order to find the fifth and most powerful weapon, they must travel down through the deepest reaches of Hell.
The first of the Races to come into existence was the Earth Dragons. Their faces held no beauty for those who looked upon them. They were monstrosities torn from every humans deepest fear and nightmares. Although they were ugly and frightful creatures, they were gentle and kind, powerful as well. They were given the Sword of Earth. It bestowed the power to raise entire continents from the ocean floor beneath them, to create mountains miles high! They could create volcanoes and islands, and created our Earth. They made it in a mirror image of their own.
The second Race to come into existence were the Nereids. They were beautiful and graceful. They had the bodies of beautiful young women above the waist and the tail of a golden serpent below. Their King, Nereus, was given the Trident of Water. It was made of solid gold so that it was never to tarnish. He could create ocean and currents to ebb and create waves. They could move and push water on land to create rivers and lakes, and create life to fill them with.
The third Race to come into existence were the Fire Demons, and they were ugly, and of Hellfire and Brimstone. They were Evil Incarnate and they knew it. They were given the Fire Staff that had beautiful and mysterious powers, but they abused them and created harmful creatures to curse the other Races with. They burned down forests and created pools of magma within in the Earth Dragons most beautiful creations.
The fourth and final Race to come into existence were the Angels. They were the most beautiful of all Races, having massive white feathered wings like that of an eagle. They were beings of pure Energy and Light. The Weapon bestowed upon them was a single Feather. But this Feather contained the Essence of all that was Good in the world, and was used to create Human Beings.
Chapter two: Humanity
But some of the Humans were tainted with the Evil of the Demons. Their Hearts were black with hatred and malice. The Humans that were left untouched by the Demons remained pure, and the Angels gave them powers to help them protect themselves from the Dark Humans. The Pure Humans moved to the continent of Cypress and built a barrier of solid Light energy that nothing Evil could get through. A young boy was born unto them and his name was Nayn. The Earth gave him a special crystal and told him to keep it with him always and it would protect his people and keep their wall strong.
The boy grew and transformed into a man, and as he did his people flourished. Everything he said would happen did. He became strong and they did as well. One day he about 35 years old his people approached him and asked him if he would like to be king and he said yes. He went to rule and his people grew and grew and grew. He had many kids and passed the stone down onto the kid that was going to rule.
