hi, this is my second piece i am writing, i would love to hear your opinion on my story and if you like it i will carry on. This is dedcated to my best friend phoebe who there would be no jenna.
It was just like any other late summers day in little villige, the sun was shinning, the flowers were blooming, everything as always was perfect. Jenna and Alla were going to their favourite valley where a little stream ran through it.
" I wish we could do this every day Ally" said Jenna
Ally laughed. " we do this everyday jenna" replied Ally
" i suppose we do, do you think we shall come here when were old?"
" Yeah of course we will! We will be bridesmade in each others wedding, Godmothers to each others children, and when were old and wrinkerly we will still come here together!"
" promise?"
"hell yeah!"
" Wow its five o clock already , want to come back to my house for tea?"
" sure!"
It was a beautify sunday morning Jenna and Ally were preparing for a picnic in the valley.
" Hey Jenna , you look a bit peaky today"
" I was to excited ,to sleep about the picnic" she said smiling weekley
The two girl walked together and when they finally got to the valley , they started to unpack the picnic.
" Do you think we can going swimming in the river today?" Asked Jenna
" I dont know it looks too cold"
"Suppose"
At that moment Ally colapsed on the floor and started to have an eplic fit. Jenna's body froze for a few seconds watching in horror as her best friend started screaming in pain but then her instnict kicked in , she ran as fast as possible to Alla's house.
* Help someone!!"
" Whats the promblem dear , wheres Ally?" Askes Ally's mum
" Shes at the valley she collapsed"
Jenny started crying , everything had been so perfect how could it go so wrong? Ally's mother called the ambulance and Ally quickly got rushed to hospital.
