This is my first ever story... yay!
Finally got round to writing it...
Anyway...
It's obvs quite boring for the first one...
But it's a trial...
And I'm going to rewrite it...
And change the story anyway...
I just need your feedback to do that...
So...
Tell me if you dont like the story...
You think I should change the names...
Anything you like to improve it...
Also...
I usually only like first person stories...
But it's in third person...
So should I make it first person...??
Luv ya...
Please help...
And enjoy...
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She sat looking at the test in her hand, repeating in her head I'm pregnant. She was going to have a baby... a baby, as in a little human being, way too much to possibly take in. So she just sat, staring wide-eyed and disbelieving trying to make herself understand what was happening. But how can you? At sixteen?
"Lucy? Come on babes," Jasmine asked. She put her hand on Lucy's leg, hoping for her to speak, to tell her that her best friend wasn't pregnant. She took the test out of Lucy's hands. As she read it with shaking hands Lucy whispered, "I'm pregnant..."
"Luce, oh my god - I..." Jasmine broke off and looked at her with tears in her eyes. Lucy still couldn't react though. It was too big, like she was hearing about someone else and in a few seconds she would realise it wasn't her.
"I need..." she began, but she didn't know what she needed. She just knew she couldn't stay sitting in Jasmine's bathroom with no understanding of how or what to think. But when she got up she swayed and felt dizziness overwhelm her so that she could hardly see.
"Lucy!" Jasmine grabbed her just before she was about to fall. "Sit down now." Lucy jerked her hand out of Jasmine's hands and flew to the toilet just before she was sick. It had suddenly sunk in and it hurt her so much. She was pregnant after having sex for the first, the one and only time. How could that have happened? But it didn't matter how, because it had, and now she couldn't even control her breathing; it came short and sharp, her chest physically hurt and her eyes flooded tears.
"Calm down, Luce. Please, please! I love you, I'm here for you," Jasmine whispered in her ear, hugging her as tightly as possible... but it's no use, not when they both know it can't be alright.
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