Fire Arcana by OnyxCoffee

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Before anything else, I would just like to remind everyone again that I'm no professional critic. Everything you will be reading from this point onward is based on my own opinions and acquired knowledge in this field. Also, I hope we can still be friends after this. Trabaho lang po. Char ('`)


Title: Fire Arcana
Author: OnyxCoffee
Genre: Fantasy
No. of story parts: 6
Status: Ongoing


Rating: ◊ ◊


R E V I E W S

Title

Your title is interesting. Magandang pakinggan. It's my first time encountering the word "arcana", so it got me intrigued. May relevance siya sa plot mo at may connection sila no'ng cover, kaya thumbs up!


Book Cover

I really like the blending! However, you could've used a better font—especially sa word na "Fire" since siya ang pinaka-highlight ng title mo

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I really like the blending! However, you could've used a better font—especially sa word na "Fire" since siya ang pinaka-highlight ng title mo. Pero overall, maganda naman na siya. Nagko-compliment sila no'ng book title. Very alluring and pleasing to the eyes. Nakatulong din siya sa sa akin na i-visualize ang character mo. Nakaka-excite buksan ang libro dahil dito.

Good job!


Synopsis

Your synopsis needs editing

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Your synopsis needs editing. Since ito ang unang mababasa ng mga readers at madalas nilang maging basehan kung bubuksan ba nila ang libro mo o hindi, kailangan mo siyang ayusin. Maganda at nakaka-curious naman na siya, hindi lang maganda ang pagkaka-present mo para sa 'kin.

Here, I tried revising it:


"Her ability's hot, but she's cold."

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Lycia, a cold woman who tends to be out of place everywhere and every time. Having been born with a dangerous arcana, she was isolated in a room that will serve as her home for her entire lifetime—until a huge war happened. The room fell victim to the war, freeing Lycia. Without a second thought, she immediately ran as far as she could get from the structure which seemed nothing but a prison to her.

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