Jeje Critiques

My Download Boyfriend by Yue_Perez

Before anything else, I would just like to remind everyone again that I'm no professional critic. Everything you will be reading from this point onward is based on my own opinions and acquired knowledge in this field. Also, I hope we can still be friends after this. Trabaho lang po. Char ('∀｀）

Title: My Download Boyfriend
Author: Yue_Perez
Genre: Fantasy (Teen Fiction/Mystery)
No. of story parts: 19
Status: On-going

Rating: ◊ ◊

R E V I E W S

Title

Nang una kong mabasa ang title mo, talagang na-curious ako. Agad na ring may nabuong concept sa utak ko pero nang mabasa ko na siya, malayo pala ang plot mula sa inaasahan ko. Which is a good thing—at least for me. However, may concern lang ako. "My Download Boyfriend" ang title, and based sa description at sa mga nabasa ko, the boyfriend you are pertaining to is a cyborg who came into being nang i-download siya ni girl unintentionally. Therefore, the boy was downloaded. Download is both a verb and a noun. Downloaded is both a verb and an adjective. Hindi mo dapat gamitinin ang noun (Download) kasunod ang isa pang noun (Boyfriend), unless gagawin mong modifier ang isa sa kanila.

It should be "My Downloaded Boyfriend", not "My Download Boyfriend". I know it sounds less appealing, pero ito ang tama. Puwede rin namang, "My Boyfriend: The Download".

It's up to you : )

Book Cover

Your cover made me nostalgic. Ito 'yong style ng covers ng mga sikat na published stories noon. The Four Bad Boys and Me, Teen Clash, The Break-up Planner, Ava Maldita—these are some of the amazing stories I fell in love with noong bago pa lang ako sa Wattpad. Kaya naman seeing your cover is like taking a walk down memory lane. Also, bihira na lang ako makakita ng ganitong style ng cover ngayon kaya, ewan, parang nakakagaan siya sa feeling. However, malaking bagay ang pagkakaroon ng connection between the title and the cover. They should complement each other. Silang dalawa dapat ang unang magbigay sa 'min ng kuwento. With your title, it would've been more fitting kung may hawak na phone si girl—or anything that would show us na "downloaded" nga 'yong boyfriend.

On the other hand, mayroon din namang book covers na mula sa isang significant scene sa istorya, so your cover works just fine... unless hindi mula sa isang important scene 'yang ginamit mo.

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