i'm just seeing if people like the way i write right now lmao please give me feedback 😔

"Where is my son?!" "Mr. Zoldyck, come in. They brought him in a half an hour ago, he lost a lot of blood on the way over-" "Is he alive?!" "Yes, b-but you have to understand, the bullet entered just above his hip and lodged into his right arm-" "Can I see him? Please?" "We're doing everything we can, but the wound was already infected when he arrived.." This is a songfic (If you don't know what that is, It's a Fanfiction based off of a song) The song is: Stay Alive (Reprise) from Hamilton! ⚠️HAMILTON, THE CHARACTERS, AND THE ART SHOWN DO NOT BELONG TO ME⚠️