This is my story assignment for school, so please give me advice so I can make it better!

Go into the heart of Hartalan and you will find a variety of people. It's a fairly large city with its many downtown attractions and also its rural countryside that wasn't far away either. Wealthy CEOs had their investments in racehorse farms out in the more rural parts while smaller businesses tended to dominate the downtown. Sure, there were plenty of large chain stores too, but there were also several hardly known gyms, vets offices, libraries, cafes and even normal grocery stores. If you can think of it, Hartalan probably has it somewhere. But don't say we didn't warn you about the, uh...rather eccentric people who live there. You'll be fine. Probably.