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The City of the Dead  by melaniepatrick
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Emerald Clemon's life is turned upside down when she is abducted by pirates. After becoming a member of the crew, Emerald is forced to face the dangerous obstacles of the sea. But what happens when lives get in the way? The immortal captain of the ship, Blackbeard, is starting to lose his immortality - and now Emerald has a chance to gain immortality herself. Her journey points to the City of the Dead, where mysteries and danger await her. It's going to be an unforgettable journey filled with danger, mermaids, monsters and the sea - with her own life at stake, it's something that will change her forever. Cover made by: RachelS8766
Undying #Wattys2015 by ADYHowle
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Milestone~ #11 in Adventure In the land of Een, the Myth, a power that protects the world, is dying. Guardians that once protected the Myth’s elemental magic in their hearts are being hunted by Waywards, a group of 12 wizards who are trying to keep the power and magic of Myth to themselves. The only way to kill a Guardian is to take its heart for your own. By doing so, you gain the power of the Guardian who represented that specific element. Aiden, a young wizard, has the Heart of a Guardian. However, once he gains his new heart, he begins to lose his humanity, forgetting what it truly means to be human. The only thing he truly remembers is Bane, his childhood friend and partner who betrayed him, by forcing the Heart of a Guardian into him against his will. With Claira, Aiden will journey to the Summit of the Alpha mountain of Theal to find Bane and end him. On his adventure, Aiden will be able to find himself, a part of him that he lost with gaining his new heart. Little does Aiden know he is the only thing stopping the Waywards from taking over the world; in his new heart, he carries the Guardian of Light’s undying flame. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Milestones! -#11 in Adventure for my book, Undying, 4/29/15 Thank you for all of your support! - #41 in Fantasy for my book, Undying 4/15/15
Diary of a soldier  by Ice-rocks0990
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They say war takes away tiny pieces of you that you can never hope to recover. The blood, the noise, the gunshots. The smell of wet mud and fear of death all around seeps into you. It changes you. But that didn't scare my brother Remy. He wanted to be a hero, and who was I to stop him? I never wanted to go to war, but I wasn't about to let my twin endanger himself without me around to save him. AWESOME COVER MADE BY @drizzlefrizzle
Blue Lupus by CandyCanesAndCoffee
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When three siblings move to back to America, they thought life would be great. Hammington was a town known for it's supernatural inclusive environment and a lack of meddling humans. Perfect for the young werewolves. However, on their first day there, danger immediately finds them. Or perhaps they brought the trouble with them? Follow along as this small family goes into battle, falls in- and out- of love, and encounter forces greater then they ever dreamed. Werewolf, Paranormal, Romance, Drama ALYSSA is the angst-y teen who loves nothing more then using a sarcastic comment to annoy her brothers. She was the youngest girl in history to turn into a werewolf and also one of the only female alphas. But with a troubled path and self destructive tendencies can someone help save her from herself? JAKE is Alyssa's older brother and Jared's twin. He is a womanizer; which is easy because of his smooth talk and great looks. However when a new werewolf crashes his world, he finds his ways of life are changing. JARED is the artistic one; always an outsider from his siblings. He was never the "cool type" in school, had no friends, and never ended up phasing into a wolf. However, he helps keep his family afloat and eventually gets into the weirdest love triangle known to man. ALASKA is the person who cares about everyone except for herself. As soon as she enters into the Approx siblings lives she just wants to help them in any way she can. However, with her own dysfunctional family and dark past, is she actually leading the small family into even more danger? AARON is the hotheaded, ruggedly handsome alpha of the Luke Pack. He does and gets whatever he wants. He hates Alyssa and she hates him. But when emotions run that high crazy things can happen. All is fair in love and war. {[EDITING IN PROGRESS]}
Open Cage by _thewritersdiary_
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Brooke never felt like she was good enough. Tormented by the images of the beautiful, perfect, and skinny girls that surrounded her in the hallways at school and the constant reminders that she wasn't one of them, she was driven to the brink. After nearly taking her own life through the process of starving herself, she was launched back into the social depths of high school, but with a new reputation on her head. Gradually she discovered that beneath the pretty and artificial stares of her peers, there lay a stark cruelty that she could never ignore. This story unfolded in the aftermath, in which Brooke found herself buried in a state of seemingly irrecoverable depression. It was only when the very girl that she had grown to resent started acknowledging Brooke again that she felt her resolve slipping away. The more that her life became intertwined with that of Natalie Price, she had to ask herself if putting her hatred aside could possibly be the key to releasing herself from the prison in which she had been confined for so long.
The Wall by DaneeH
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The Patron by penthesilea-
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A mastermind with a criminal reputation stemming from legend, the Patron is shrouded in mystery, operating only through his agents. Tricked, blackmailed, coerced, or just plain evil, the agents could be anybody, and they'll do... or kill... anything for the Patron. Enter Lannion, Adrien, and Wesley of the king's guardsmen. They're tasked with the mission of countering the Patron, but with every move they make, they fall deeper into his web of lies. Nobody can be trusted, and nobody is safe. Historical Fiction #86 (draws inspiration from the Three Musketeers by Alexandre Dumas, but only a little bit.) don't steal my stuff k thanks igd 2015
Speak To Me by izzy_raven_poe
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All I wanted to do was speak to him. To scream at him for being the biggest asshole, but words would never have the strength to fill the air between him and I. Elijah Hemsworth would be the last person to hear me speak, but some secrets were worth hearing. Some pasts were worth digging through, but if you're caught too far, you might lose yourself to their demons. But that's all I wanted: Someone who's demons would be willing to play with mine.
The Parallel Shift by demystify
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After Professor Chris Reid crossed the portal to another Parallel Universe, he gained the ability to control space and time. However, a dark figure followed him and threatened to destroy the balance of his reality. Only Chris could stop him there is only one way. To find Dana Clarke.
The Angel of the Ocean by story234
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Losing a friend is difficult for anyone, but for Emilia she lost everything that day. Her whole world shattered. From that day on, she herself ceased to exist. Drew had always promised to help her best friend out in any way she could, but little did she know how far this promise would have to stretch.