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Arisu [ #JustWriteIt - Horror - Complete ] by TheNightPhantom
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T h i s W h i t e R a b b i t i s f a r f r o m a f a i r y t a l e . . . Three travellers arrive at a manor, seeking asylum from the midnight hour of Halloween. They know the place is rumoured to have a monster roaming its halls, but what harm could a short stay do? They'd be leaving as soon the clock struck one. But 'it' won't stand for that, oh no. Their brief visit swiftly turns to chaos when nightfall arrives on its silver horse. The manor's innocent façade is melting away, the children are being hunted down and their guardian finds himself entangled in a dangerous wonderland of illusion and trickery. For whom does the bell toll? Don't look 'it' in the eye. And don't trust yours either, robotic or not. [ If you so desire to open this book, please do so at your own risk, dear reader. Frightful games of rabbit-and-mouse, a bloodied sewing kit, a touch of magic, and the ferocious desire to guard those whom are loved await. Thank you. ] [ Completed 31st of October, 2015 ] [Highest Ranking - #133 in Horror]
Unknown Horizons (Lesbian Space Opera) by cjbirch
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The moment Lieutenant Alison Ash steps aboard the Persephone she knows her life will never be the same. With that one step she is crossing the thresholds of history. In less than three weeks the ship will dock at the Posterus, the first ever generational ship, and begin the most ambitious and epic journey humankind has ever undertaken. A journey she is not meant to survive, a journey to be completed by decedents not yet named. What Ash doesn't expect, is that by keeping her recent memory loss a secret she is jeopardizing not only the Persephone's mission but humankind's launch of this historic ship. Nor does she anticipate her growing attraction to Captain Jordan Kellow but, both will change her life forever. Formerly titled Patience Completed: Book one of three.
Ignite My Insanity by Kate_Marr
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(Oh lord this book. Good luck.) First book in the 'Forbidden Flames' series! A twisted cliche where the boy really IS bad. His name; Isaac Cohan. Your every fear since childhood wrapped into one big living nightmare. Her name; Maisie Mayfield. The very embodiment of rainbows and butterflies wrapped into one big, sparkly, yellow, innocent bow. She gets more than she bargains for. He becomes more than he wishes for. Together they bring destruction upon everything they both thought they knew. Nothing can prepare them for the outcome; a star-crossed love that... Well, you'll see. ................. WARNING: This is not your typical dark love story where the guy controls/abuses the girl and just completely dominates over her. The two main characters are equally strong in each their own way --they both have their own flaws as well. Don't expect a story where the guy is a big asshat because I can guarantee that you will fall madly in love with Isaac without him needing to put Maisie down. However, that being said, there's a lot more to this book than the romance aspect. If you're looking for an easy read where the two come together slowly and in the end have their final realization of love for each other... Turn back now. Imagine a book series inspired by Romeo & Juliet then take that and twist it into something completely unrecognizable. You are not ready for the madness that is this series if you're looking for love that easily overcomes all. Upon opening the pages to this book you will find diabolical plans of destruction, turns of events that will make your heart ache, and surprises that make your head turn in suspense. Enter at your own risk! Started July 2015 Posted online Sept 20th 2015 - 100+ votes (oct 14, 2015) 1k! (Dec 2, 2015) - 100+ votes a chapter (dec 6, 2015) - #250 Paranormal Hot List (oct 14, 2015) #94 !!(nov 8, 2015) #55!!!(nov 9, 2015) - 1k reads (oct 26, 2015) 9k (Jan 2016) ***Beautiful cover by @Spite- ! Isn't it awesome?***
A Serious Matter by TheNightPhantom
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There are eight people sitting around the table. You can hear a pin drop. They have a serious matter to deal with. (Written while stuck in a room with no internet connection. Posted on Wattpad to give someone a good laugh.)