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The War In His Mind by AndrewPurdum
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After war devastated the United States, a survivor buried himself deep underground in a cryostasis chamber connected to a digital world- Wonder City. Dedicated to creating a perfect society, Thomas O'Neil transported his consciousness to the city and dedicated his life to creating a better world. But there's a major catch- everyone in the world is an exact clone of him without any emotions, passions, or original thoughts. Everyone is created through "The Code", a computer code designed to create people and assign jobs. For years it's worked flawlessly, filling Wonder City full of workers and civilians. The society was successful. Until one day when a glitch in the code created the first clone with emotions and thoughts- #937. Angry and determined to have free will, 937 sets out on a path to create a better world from the ashes of the old empire. What happens when the city of the future becomes a world that O'Neil can't contain? Welcome to Wonder City. Welcome to the future. **** Please keep in mind that this is a first draft. Many details, paragraphs, and chapters will inevitably change between this and the final version. There's still lots to be smoothed out. Thank you for understanding! I'm very open to suggestions! -Andrew Purdum
Endless Summer [Season 1: Orlando] by RoleplayNation_
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Welcome to Endless Summer, the true story of 16 strangers picked to move in a house, live together and have their lives documented. Find out what happens when people stop being polite and start getting real! [RP]
Lie To Me by Amazing_Aims
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"You are the best friend I could ever have!" I gritted through my teeth. "In other words I'm an idiot." He smiled at me with his cocky grin and all I wanted to do was smack the shit out of him. "Seriously you're the greatest human being in the world." I said my anger surfacing. "Translation. I'm an asshole is that the best you got?" He raised his eyebrow as he dared me with his eyes. ~*~*~ Jayce Valentine has lived the best life any girl would ever want. The life of a popular girl, but there's a secret behind her sweet sugar coated words that no one has ever found out. That is until Sean Blackwater comes around and sees through everything they say. They can't stand each other and yet why is it that Jayce is slipping from her world of lies and all because Sean called her something that she can never repeat.