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One Step At A Time by Miichiee
Miichiee
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Aspyn White seems like your typical, happy, 16 year old girl. Nothing in her life could possibly be better than it already is, right? Wrong. Very, very wrong. There is always a lot more than what meets the eye. There is always something stirring under the surface. That's life. You just have to take it one step at a time. ~ "One Step At A Time" is a novel that gives insight into the life of a teenager. Aspyn must face the tragedies and hardships that are kept quiet, but a lot of teens have to face everyday. A story about love, life, and all the bumps along the way - with a few twists, of course. [Copyrights: All Rights Reserved 2013]
Vanished Hope by Passion_Love
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Contest Entry for Song-Based Romance Writing Contest hosted by @total_dreamer. <Things we lost in the fire by Bastille> "She's gone." Upon hearing the news of his wife Clare dead, Will lost himself entirely. He could only feel the pain and remorse seeping through his body, spreading throughout his veins as every second ticked by. "It was all my fault." He thought. In a moment of anger, he said things he shouldn't have and all he was left with was these feelings of pain and remorse. How he wished he could sleep for eternity with his wife, but he knew he couldn't. He had to stay strong for the sake of his three-year-old daughter, Fay. But he couldn't make up his mind and was now stuck between two options: Live or Die.
Fading Stars by youthfulwriter
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When a drunken beggar opens up a new world of opportunities to Luke, he is thrust into a journey of elephantine consequence. Spurred on by a bunch of grouchy gnomes and an omen in the form of disappearing stars, Luke must decide between what he wants or the hopes and dreams of a mysterious girl he meets along the way. What happens when two ancient worlds threaten to collide, sending opposing civilisations into oblivion? The answer is in the stars.
Tainted Fruit (Wattpadprize14) by turquoiselvr
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He was alone in the world. No one was there for him when he needed it the most. His heart was throbbing, an empty void had made shelter there. He needed love, but no one could see that. They couldn't see how much pain they had caused. They didn't know about the countless times he had cried himself to sleep. His new best friend was the blade. It had helped him go through the hardships he faced. It took away all the emotional pain he was in. He carved himself, hoping someone would take notice, and help him. No matter, how hard he cried out for help, he never received it. Everyone had ignored his cries for help. His parents had turn their backs on him. Why? Because he was an abomination, a disgrace. He didn't live up to his parents' expectations so they turned the other way, and never looked back
Borderline [On hold for major revision] by NotWhoIWant2Be
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Border Patrol Agent Cal Tucker has lived off of instinct for as long as he could remember. But when he accurately predicts increasingly unlikely events by "following his gut", he can tell that something is about to change. He works all day catching illegal immigrants who work to ruin the lives of others, but he harbors a deeply buried secret: he may catch bad guys during the day, but at night he helps those who simply want a fresh start. Even those who are by the country's definition "illegal aliens". Now enemies on both sides of the law are hunting him, and they aren't giving up until they get what they want.
The Craters in the Moon by jetaime26
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Arden Gray: A catty, beautiful, endlessly underestimated teenage girl drowning in a crippling tidal wave of depression. She spends more time in the realm of books than reality, and struggles to keep her head above water as her world seemingly comes crashing down around her. Lucas Riverton: The seventeen year old boy in the awkward stage between child and adulthood, who works at a local bookstore as a means of escape. He barely knows Arden, but is positive that there is something about her, something he wants to devote the rest of his life to figuring out. Two worlds connect in an unfathomable force as young lovers relish in the discovery of a feeling that is beyond description--- and do everything in their power to prevent the inevitable destruction of it. ~~ REVIEWS ~~ "A poignant story about the deterioration of love between two young teenagers that don't know anything but how to fall." "...flawless, simple, and very imaginative." "This is a wonderful, angsty story...read in one sitting!" "Arden Gray is a unique and quirky character that I found myself growing attached to right away...This author manages to pack more emotion in one sentence of dialogue than most people can in a whole paragraph of metaphorical description."
Errand Runners by Next_JK_Rowling
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[Check out BOUNTY HUNTERS, the sequel to Errand Runners] Unlike the other criminals in Nova City, Nole Vale has a curfew. While most civilians just want to survive in their crime-ridden, gang-infested city, this sixteen-year old is determined to conquer the city streets and provide for his brother and sister by any means necessary. But after crashing into a mysterious teenager, Nole is suddenly accused of a crime he didn't commit and his stable way of life begins to crumble. With the help of a diverse, yet peculiar group of teenagers, he must navigate his way through lethal gangs, brutal City Enforcers, and a corrupt city system in order to clear his name and keep himself and his siblings alive. Cover by @sequester All rights reserved. All material in this book (Errand Runners), and everything on this account is, unless otherwise stated, the property of the owner, creator and author of this work (@Next_JK_Rowling). Copyright and other intellectual property laws protect these materials. Reproduction or retransmission, in whole or in part, or in any manner, without the prior written consent of the copyright holder is a violation of the Copyright, Patents and Design Act of 1988 law and is punishable by law.
One Last Breath of A Loved Vampire by OsmosiaLee
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✟ A goddess is she… A lamb is she… A threat is she… Who is she? Better yet, what is she? ✟ Karin Meadows is being haunted day and night by someone or rather, something. The pitiful Karin struggles to protect herself, but how will things turn out when she discovers her true identity? Book 1
A Kidnapper's Dream (Unedited) by Prettylikeapoem
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~A Kidnapper's Dream~ Once Upon A Time... There were no princesses or princes. There were no knights in shinning armor. There were no dragons to be slayed. There was a twenty-two-year-old woman named Jessalyn and it seemed like God hated her. When Jessalyn was little her parents mysteriously disappeared and a few years later she was almost murdered, but instead she was left disfigured. This was all because of the man who saved her that night, a man who left so quickly that she couldn't even see his face. Now, when Jessalyn is all grown up she's given up on everything in her life and she ends up being kidnapped. At first, Jessalyn thinks it's like Hell on Earth with her strange kidnapper, but slowly she starts to rethink it. Will Jessalyn let her emotions get the best of her? -Amazing cover by: @crazycherries Story takes places in the Victorian Era.-