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Redemption by KameronLong
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There are things in this world that we, as humans, choose to turn a blind eye to in the interest of our own selfish desires. Things that can ultimately blacken your soul and corrupt you from the inside out as the City of Danville soon realizes. The city, once a shining example of beauty and perfection, giving way to become nothing more than a crime riddled cesspool. With the city approaching what very well could be the point of no return, an intervening hand steps in to give Danville one last shot at Redemption. But, the redemption that this helping hand offers isn't the kind that one would expect. Plans ultimately unfold and lives are destroyed as Danville is taken to its breaking point and converges on being torn apart by the very seams that held it so tightly together. Which offers up the city a question: How far is one truly willing to go to sacrifice it all for one last chance at Redemption?
Ginger's Heart 01: Body Heat [1st draft] by gossamersilverglow
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[Original] Planning a massacre at a boarding school advertised to gifted teens was just the foot in the door Ginger needed to get 'Humans Against Supernatural Persons', a worldwide anti-supernatural organization, to notice her. As a newbie hunter she'd literally won a killing spree jackpot... if she, as a human, could get into a school solely for supernatural creatures of the royal variety. Posing as an unbound human servant made getting accepted easy. Unfortunately, it seemed to be the only easy part. Ginger didn't expect to make fast friends with Trina, her gluttonous Gargoyle roommate or for her rampant hormones, which the internet insisted was puberty, to run wild. She didn't expect to be the origin of a horror story whispered through the walls of the academy and she most definitely didn't expect an assassination attempt on her life. Now, the creatures she'd been slaughtering behind closed doors were trying to save her and Ginger has to figure out why she's number one on a targeted list printed by H.A.S.P, the very organization she'd worshipped. It's funny how things work. Authors Note: I have 19 or 20 (iffy) chapters complete, but only five have been edited. This is NOT the edited version. It's the version I wrote in 2011/2012. Updates? Since I have about 20 rough draft chapters I'll update once a week until I have no chapters left. Thanks goes out to the 'Is you summary/blurb good enough' thread started by @EdgarMalboeuf for helping with the summary!
Six Types of Love by lostmemoria
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College drop out meets wealthy hotel heiress. Things get dangerously frisky. • • • achievements ⇢ mystery/thriller #715 [june 19, 2014] ⇢ general fiction #315 [august 2, 2014]
Their Blue Rose by KatSalling
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“Cheyne Ivy. Now stop calling me Princess” I brusquely reply. Liam smirks, “Well, Princess—“I glare, which only makes Liam laugh more, “How would you like to make all your nasty little fantasies come true?” Cheyne Ivy used to be the captain of the cheer squad with the perfect boyfriend, but something happened to make her not want any of it. Now Cheyne is friends with Alexis, the troublemaker and school slut. On a night out, she meets Liam O’Connor. He’s arrogant and annoys her to no end. He makes her face her problems all while dragging her into a world she should’ve never been a part of. Welcome to her life.
Rabbit Hole by thewritingchic
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Maeve is the fifth child of the Great King of Miror Terram. She seems insignificant, being the youngest in the royal family, but she has something special; a great destiny awaits her. In this action-packed, nail-bitingly suspenseful story, follow Maeve, along with a few of her friends, as her destiny takes her where she least suspects it...even down a rabbit hole. BOOK ONE (Unedited and unfinished, updated every Tuesday!)
#THE HASHTAG by ShadieTree
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Lexi Lennon has a bad attitude and everyone knows it. Becoming or staying friends with someone has never been a priority, because she didn't give a damn about what people thought of her. So when an anonymous website surfaces at school, threatening to reveal everyone's deepest darkest secrets, Lexi doesn't even bat any eye. That is, of course, before she realizes that her secrets are the ones at stake. -cover made by pressure-
Love You Endlessly (Larry Stylinson) by Thissleepykitty
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❝All we have is time, and with that we can be infinite.❞
Blood Pact: The Embrace by Nenphis
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This is a world where werewolves are locked away, vampires shot down and magic kept secret. But burning witches and staking warlocks won't be enough to keep true evil away. Runaway Olivia must now face her past and test the limits of her powers, while escaping her constant pursuers. While being wrongly accused of a crime she did not commit and feared by all, she is not sure whether she is the hunter or the hunted. Fear is pain arising from the anticipation of evil...the shadows of death are lurking closer and closer, forcing Olivia to face her destiny.
The Titans Wake [The Write Awards 2014] by AuthorJordanHilliard
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The four titans of Earth, Water, Wind, and Fire have laid dormant, sleeping buried within the planet for 10000 years. But when a celestial event summons their awakening, all of civilisation must pull together to stop them from their only purpose; to purge the planet. Emilia Rose, granddaughter of a legendary thief, must leave her life of luxury behind on a quest to uncover the grave of her grandmother. Legend has it that the last magic gauntlet rests with her remains and it might be the only thing that can fight back against the titans and save humanity. Meanwhile, at the tournament, the greatest spectacle of competition in the west, tensions are rising. With the fear of titans at large and an army approaching from the east, the rulers in the west gather their swords and prepare to fight for survival. From wild savage cannibals in the woods to fire breathing dragons atop mountains, even lowly guards and bakers boys can find their lust for adventure and their place in the great wars to come.
The Forgotten Rose {COMPLETED} by medievalrose
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In the midst of a storm conjured by a witch's wind Anne Neville's story is only just beginning. Second daughter of England's most powerful noble, Anne's childhood was lived in the shadows surrounded by bloody civil war and overpowered by her elder sister. When her fathers ploys to make her sister queen fail Anne finds herself pushed into the light. Exiled in France and married to a forgotten prince, at fourteen Anne becomes the start of a new rebellion to overthrow the king her father had so keenly sat upon the throne. Taught to be a queen by the fearless Margaret of Anjou Anne sails back to England to claim her new powers only to find herself fatherless and widowed. Pitied by the king she once called friend, Anne is taken into the care of the kings brother; but he is not her safety, he is her prison. Anne's inheritance hangs in the balance pushed towards the holy life Anne makes her escape, falling into the arms of the kind Duke of Gloucester, a childhood friend, who would one day become the villainous Richard III. In a court surrounded by murder and deceit Anne has to find her way. With a watchful eye on the queen she named witch and the king she feared to call friend, and only her own ambitions pushing her forward; Anne fails to notice the evil rising beside her, for her saviour is just as deadly as her capturer.