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Fading Stars by youthfulwriter
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When a drunken beggar opens up a new world of opportunities to Luke, he is thrust into a journey of elephantine consequence. Spurred on by a bunch of grouchy gnomes and an omen in the form of disappearing stars, Luke must decide between what he wants or the hopes and dreams of a mysterious girl he meets along the way. What happens when two ancient worlds threaten to collide, sending opposing civilisations into oblivion? The answer is in the stars.
Scarlet Desires: Last High Blood by EternallyUs
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[EXCERPT] I swerved around and managed to prevent a werewolf from attacking Lincoln's unprotected back in the nick of time. Adrenaline rushed through my veins as I deflected the multiple slashes from the werewolf; focusing on my own battle instead of worrying about Lincoln. Words could not describe my feelings when my cold blade kissed the attacker's thick skin at the nape of its neck, leaving behind a trail of crimson blood. A yelp tore from its throat as it backed away from me. The corners of my lips lifted upwards when Lincoln said a word of encouragement. Our backs met for a fleeting moment before we sprung back into action again. Pushing my limits to the brink of being Crazed, I relied on my increased stamina as a vampire for the sake of winning this difficult battle. The scent of blood, the sound of the delicious veins pumping the sweet, red juice to the werewolves' hearts, and the sight of their muscles tensing teased my ultimately magnified senses to tear their bodies apart. I became hungry. ~~~ Artemis Columbine, previously known as Fennel August, was killed on that one fateful night by a Crazed vampire. It wasn't a coincidence that he wanted to sink his teeth into her neck, she possessed the powers of an ultimate ruler of them all. High Blood. Although she is saved from Oblivion by a vampire who is respected by all kinds of creatures, her memories were still lost in that place of darkness and sorrow. Despite being rescued only for her savior's selfish reasons, will she choose to stay with him or search for her human parents? Or worse, recover her rightful throne and slaughter anyone that comes in her way? Highest #208 in Fantasy Cover made by @elphadora
The Acting Geek by Linsy13
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Venice Carter is a young aspiring actress, and at the age of 14 she makes her debut in the form of a TV show audition. Things seem great; she has a long term boyfriend named Caleb, and as she gets older her career gets better. She has phases of loving her fans and phases of hating them, and after a few years, Venice and Caleb get married. Eventually, the reality of her lifestyle catches up with her sending her into a downward spiral of depression, and she even turns to drugs and alcohol. Will rehab help her or will the birth of her child end it all?
The Earl of Brass (IMD #1) by writershabitarium
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Wattpad Prize Winner 2014 for Best Imaginative Story! NOW AVAILABLE ON AMAZON, BARNES AND NOBLE, THE BOOK DEPOSITORY, iTUNES AND SMASHWORDS IN PAPERBACK AND EBOOK! When Eilian Sorrell, a promising archaeologist and the eldest son of the Earl of Dorset, loses his arm in a dirigible crash, he fears he will face a bleak future among London's aristocracy. On a quest for normalcy, Lord Sorrell commissions a prosthetic arm but finds the craftsman is not what he seems. After the death of her brother, Hadley Fenice takes over his prosthesis business but knows it will be an uphill battle as women are discouraged from doing man’s work. In return for building Lord Sorrell an automaton arm, he offers her a chance at freedom by following him to the Negev Desert under the guise of a man. But what lies beneath the desert is more precious than potshards or bones. As they venture deeper, they discover a society where the path of life is not governed by gain but by passion. When imperialistic invaders come in search of a new colony to pillage, Eilian and Hadley are forced to defend their fleeting glimpse of paradise. The Ingenious Mechanical Devices Series: The Earl of Brass The Winter Garden All the works that are posted under my screen name are mine exclusively and cannot be reproduced, altered, or used in any manner without my permission.