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A Game Called Love by aayika
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" I'll destroy you in the most beautiful way possible, and when I leave you, you'll finally understand why storms are named after people. " She burned like the sun,trying to hide all the darkness that clouded her life,but her fire burned him to ashes. Reece Salazar has spent his entire life coming second to the great Aurora Williams.The perfect little miss goody shoes who never loses an opportunity to rub her victory on his face.Best friends at six,bitter rivals at twenty.When the battles get personal and it's no more about business deals and projects but love and seduction,will they realize they have more to lose than what they have to win?
Life Support #wattys2015 by IChangedMyMind
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A dead girl, a dead boy, and a living boy try to fix the world. Cover by Bailley3
My Brother's Best Friend by MidnightDiamond2013
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Ryan and Ruby's brother, Matt, have been best friends for years. Ryan always wanted to go to the army and 6 months ago that finally happened for him. Ryan and Ruby have always been close and two days before Ryan left, they slept together. Little does Ryan know that Ruby fell pregnant after their night together and is just under 3 months away from her due date. When Ryan finds out that he's about to have a baby, will he stand by Ruby or will he run? Chris was in the army with Ryan and the pair were great friends. However, after a tragic event, Chris no longer wanted to have anything to do with Ryan. In fact, he now hates Ryan's guts and blames him for what happened. What will happen when he turns up on the scene? How will Ryan react when he learns of Chris's feelings? And just how far is Chris willing to go to get even? All Rights Reserved ©2021 MidnightDiamond2013
Homeschoolers On Their Own by seabird16
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Everyone thinks homeschoolers have a boring life. But here, three must depend on each other for survival when they are kidnapped by a sardonic killer. One is an outcast of his own family and hiding a big secret. One is a leader and as immature at times as they come. And one is trapped between the two. She is resourceful and clever, and falling for someone she'd never think to look at twice. Can they escape, before it's to late? How will homeschoolers survive....on their own?
Formidable Occupation by Dusk2Day
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I live in a world where people know they are going to die. The company I work in, the NIA (or National Insurance Agency), sells life insurance. But this isn't your typical insurance company. The NIA sells life insurance that comes with a prediction based off of a complicated equation that tells you when you're going to die. Everyone is supposed to die according to their prediction. At least, most of the time they do. There are, of course, exceptions. People that don't die according to their prediction- and the company doesn't like that. This is where I come in. I'm a hit man. It's an easy job, really. I snatch up the target, murder, and clean up the trails. Sometimes, though, things happen. She happened.
Demon Stories by SumireHime
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Killing: an act of love so sweet your body falls victim to such an ecstasy the staccato of the heart bursts your very soul and you perish into the stars above like so many unfortunates who have met the one called demon. Beau, Violette, Diana, Josephine, and Saya are demons who snatch the lives of the living to live themselves. Killing, loving. But what is to kill as is to love? What is a human, what is a demon, what is an angel, or even to live? A journey through human history from Ancient Asia to the Roman Empire to Victorian England to Bohemian Paris to modern Japan and much more, the demons tell their stories as like to a lover's ear. {I'm not trying to scare you. I'm just trying to write something beautiful. This is not horror, really. I don't know how to describe it.} Note: The stories can be read separately or together. Many of them are one-shots, or constructed to be stand-alone even if they are connected to the overall plot. So you really can choose whichever one sounds most intriguing to you, whether by character or time period or country, or whatever you want really. Can't get enough? Read "The Demon Stories Companion", full of sneak peeks, explanations, weird things, and even mini Demon Stories: http://www.wattpad.com/story/3675130-the-demon-stories-companion
Two Worlds: Clash of the Guardians (Completed) by YiLinOoi
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*Vampires* II *Romance* II *Action* Elli Nilsson is twenty years old when she is abducted as hostage by a horde of blood-suckers called the Vampists. The Vampists, from a magical kingdom called Reminis, have threathened Elli's father into making them suits of chainmail that would prevent them from being killed. The villains, however, didn't fulfill their promise. They kill Elli's father once they receive the suits of chainmail. Driven by hatred and fury, Elli vows to avenge her father. She has teamed up with three sorcerors in her quest of bringing the Vampists down. As the quest goes on, Elli soon realises, the kingpin of the Vampists, Vadiraj, is nobody but a confused man who strives to earn the respect of his kin. While everyone sees him as a vicious blood-sucker who desires to conquer the kingdom of Reminis, they didn't see his loneliness. While everyone sees him as a vicious man who kills to live, they didn't see he's capable to love. While everyone sees him opening the portal to the human world to get the protective chainmail, they didn't see he's there for a hidden motive. It all starts with a prophecy. __________ I'd like to emphasize that I don't own the pictures or the videos in the Multimedia column. The songs may not have any relation to the story line. They're, however, my favourite. They're not meant to be listened along the story. __________ This story has intense plots and every scene. Please note that English is only my third language. So, if you see any grammatical mistakes, forgive me. I love feedback and will always return the favour. __________ This story has two parts in most of the chapters. The first part is under Elli's POV. It has stronger fantasy cum adventure elements. The second part is under Vadiraj's POV. It's more towards romance and paranormal genres. Hmm, what else? Have fun!
Hidden by IzzieKap
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Ariana Felder had a great life - she was popular, got good grades, and was getting ready to go to her dream college. But one night changed all of that. She was taken and held captive for a month before finally getting rescued. And now, the man who took her is looking for her. Ariana is told that everyone thinks she is dead and she has to start over in a different state with a different name. Not so great now, huh? Added onto that, she has to have protection. Taylor Jennings, a young and handsome bodyguard, ends up being assigned to her. That means they have to live together, eat together, basically do everything together. There's bound to be tension. But is something more going to come out of the situation? And will her kidnapper find her before they can find him?
I spy a dragon(eragon fanfiction) by 19magic
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Thirty years ago a war was threatening to break out between Scotland and England. By the murder of a princess, a princess called Diana. The people who got arrested were scottish (or framed as they cried out). To stop an escalating catastrophe, groups of spies and government agents went undercover to find the murderers. To find out, if they were even scotish to begin with. Fithteen years ago a child was born to genetic engineering, antibodies and gene improvement - the ultimate espionage unit. The parents were offered money to keep the baby. After all, they dispised all thoughts of having a child, and never even gave her a name. Now, the Claire looks like a young woman and is the best assasin to the goverments name. She lives alone, with Clara as her only friend...
Finding Eden by EdeleWeiss
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My grandmother told me a story once, of a fearless hero that would turn everything around. He would come from the utopian city of Eden to save the innocent, and we could walk outside without fearing the dark. I used to cling to the legend like a life preserver in an ocean of grey, searching for that speck of beautiful blue. That was until she was murdered in the crossfire between two feuding gangs. I soon forgot about the fairytale she told me, trying to fend for myself in the streets. It wasn’t until much later that I remembered that story. The night I attempted a one-woman rebellion and changed my fate forever.