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Perpetual #Wattys2017 by Ruch1990
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Sophie wanted a side dish. Rachel was too wild to settle for anything less than awesome. Angie had her eyes set on academic achievements. One list... It took one list for the girls to change their beliefs because any and every teenager wants a side dish. After-all they are still discovering themselves, but what happens when fate gives you 'THE DISH' in the form of DJ, Hadden and Dorian. Would the girls follow what fate has planned for them or do they stick to their beliefs, no matter who they hurt/ love in the process.
The Riskiest Game (ON HOLD) by mishiethefishie
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"Let me offer you a deal," she snarled, playing with the die in her hands. I peek out at her from under my eyelashes. Her expression is cautious, calculating. "If I roll a 1, 2, or 3, we laugh this off. We pretend it never happened, and we move on." I consider her words. She continues. "If I roll a 4 or 5, I win. If I roll a 6, you win." The deal obviously isn't a fair one, or a rational one- on either of our parts. But I knew the reward of winning, and I knew the cost of losing. Her grin stretched wider, her cockiness apparent. Weighing my options, I let out a long sigh. Then I surprise not only her but also myself. "Deal." She rolls the die. ~ Bree Kimbrough had never been one to gamble. But when Meredith Lozano, a powerful heiress, decides that she was worthy of her time, Bree faces an offer she just can't refuse. She doesn't really mind being a pawn for Meredith to control- because she knows all too well there are much more dangerous games to play. Unfortunately, Bree is about to learn the rules to one of the deadliest games of all: destroying the populars. ~ STORY INFO: ~Strong language, violence, and sexual material ~Not appropriate for all audiences ~Uncompleted, still writing -Cliche hot guys who may or may not use nicknames ;)
ESPRESSO by empty-promises
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'When you can relate to a villains thoughts and feelings, does that make you equally villainous?" This question was what ate away at the tight-knit friend group , twenty years after the brutal murders. Secrets and lies were what bound the group together, but what will happen to them when one member decides they can no longer keep their silence and the truth begins to unravel?
Find Your Fangs by WhiskeyWaves
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Knight Lucero has always been a prowler of the night, especially when his best friend Charlie became homeless. But when he meets a fellow "lunaholic" on the brink of death in the sludge of the LA river, he has to ask himself what the California Badlands have to hide besides teenage taggers and orphans on the run. With a runaway father that looms closer and darker than Knight could ever know, and a partially oblivious mother than drifts in and out of a drugged haze filled with secrets, Knight must find his way through gang-wars, betrayal, and things that go bump in the night. And through it all, learn who he really is and who he was always meant to be.
The Last Philosopher: Part One by NickfEast
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11x featured wattpad story. Before everything, it's assumed there was nothing, but what if there was no real difference between the two? Just two extreme philosophies from the first conflict. The planet Huom has been under observation for longer than should technically be possible. The primary watcher, a bitter black hole, is excited to see that there is finally a proverbial Darkness at the end of the tunnel. Meanwhile, on the planet, in the freezing mountains of Empris, Lyeasrakardsul, the oldest living sorcerer, suffers from devastating nightmares. At the same time, far away in the sandstone desert of Zenon, Herschel, a man filled to the brim with weird ideas is escaping a prison filled with strange old men. What does all this have to do with arsehole Gods, hairy Dwarfs, frustrated Afreets, curious Knomes, lizard-women, and nude Áettar? Perhaps Nothing, perhaps Everything... but why can't it be both?
A Homophobic Homosexual by that_gay_lifestyle
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When Skye Hart started school at Horndoe Prep, a boarding school in California, she knew she would learn many new things about herself, but she never imagined she would learn she's a lesbian. Growing up in a homophobic household, Skye herself is homophobic and she refuses to accept her feelings that she develops for her roommate. Will Skye stick with what she believes in or will she follow her heart and find true love?
Decode Or Die by bubble_froth
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Hard it is, to lose a friend to car crash. Especially when it is you who was driving. Harder is to realize someone severed the wires of the brake. Its a sabotage, but Kate was just a mistaken victim to death. The actual target breathes, Beatrice wishes she died long ago. Because everyday a small piece of her dies. Which seems.... WORST.
The Catalyst by kittersummers
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In a politically volatile kingdom, Noah is tasked with finding the catalyst, a magical artifact rumored to greatly enhance the potential of the wielder. Joining his efforts are his childhood best friend and an illegitimate prince doing the queen's bidding in exchange for his lover's freedom. It soon becomes clear that many different parties are after the catalyst, though no one seems to know who started this chase or why. In order to survive and save the people he cares about, Noah will have to leave behind everything he thought he knew about magic and adapt to a new reality of unlikely alliances and painful betrayals, high-stakes power struggles, and vengeful entities.
Cantopica Dragon Legends: War of Seven by ACEChoiceLinbin
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A young girl must fight to get the information she needs to become better. Her and her friends take on six races to make it to the top. What will happen if the girl find out who she really is? Will she hide or will she fight even if it costs her everything?