Based on my friend

Ellie Ghoul is a selfish girl, who only cares for appearance. Lately, drowning her pores with makeup, she faces a dilemma. No one wants to be friends with a snotty 13 year old. Being told that people also care for personality, she decides to take it her way. Does she decide to change for what's best, or make it even worse? (I'm a young writer, message me what I can improve on.)