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hearts open by cherryknotted
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Beth and Eliot never expected to cross paths. Beth, after all, didn't expect to move to the tiny town of Lipscomb, and Eliot was always too invested in his work to notice the world flying by around him. But in the midst of their troubles, they find each other, hearts open. or the story of a florist and a fireman
A Race Against Death by Browneyed_Writer
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Previously Titled: Mafia's Witness I wanted to turn away but it was too late he pulled the trigger and I witnessed the bullet go straight through his head, splattering blood and ending the man's wailing. His eyes were cold and lifeless, and there was red liquid pouring out from the side of his gaping mouth and his head. My body felt numb and I could feel the bile rising in my throat as I fell back onto the cold hard pavement behind the dumpster. "There, that finally shut him up." the shadow said with an icy cold voice, slipping the gun back into his pocket. ________ Logan has finally returned to the station to find out that he has to watch over Julie when he'd rather be doing something that requires more of his skill. He didn't know how difficult it would be to keep an eye on Julie or how rebellious she is and realized she might be more trouble than she's worth. The last thing twenty-two-year-old Julie had expected was that she'd be a witness to a murder done by none other than one of the infamous gang leader Allen. With her life now at stake will she be able to survive with the help of Officer Logan? Highest Ranking: #344 in Action
Death and the Emperor by NerissaMcC
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His Grace the Grand Duke Kilan never expected to become Emperor of Carann. But things rarely go as planned, and this is no exception. Who knows, he might even learn to like being Emperor. He could do without Death's interference, though. {Written for NaNoWriMo 2017, Camp NaNoWriMo June 2018, and NaNoWriMo 2018} Cover by @xXArachnidXx
Countdown To Reanimation by andreamaller
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After Alyson wanders into her father's laboratory, she stumbles upon one of his secret experiments. One that she was unwittingly a part of. Her discovery not only shatters her reality, but puts her life in danger when a rival scientist will stop at nothing to steal her father's work.
Finding Chase by livvydavis
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As Riley enters her senior year at UCLA with her best friend, Emily, she is determined to have the year of her life: purely fun, no strings attached, and no regrets. What she isn't ready for is Chase Adams, the dark haired singer that leaves her breathless. Will Riley have the year she dreamed of, or will she fall for an unlikely person that finds his way into her life?
Princess of the Sky by plunkey
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CROWN PRINCESS ARIANNA is at a crossroads in her life. To thwart off encroaching enemies, she must not become the queen her people want, but the one they need in the darkest hour of their lives: A living weapon with the power to strike fear into the hearts of her foes, swat away airships, and crush entire armies. ULION is an aether gatherer who works with his sister. Aboard a massive airship powered by steam alone, the duo travel, capturing the strange element located inside deadly storms. When one storm proves fatal, Ulion loses everything and ends up alone in a world that has no tolerance for those who serve no purpose. PRINCESS BEATRICE of Candia can see into the future. The death of her loved ones, the death of herself, and even the end of the entire world are constantly at the forefront of her mind. As she fights a losing battle to maintain her sanity, she finds courage enough to make an attempt to do the impossible: Change what is already meant to be. In a realm of mountains and sand, kingdoms and empires clash in an epic power struggle. And these three lives, intertwined, will make the final difference as humanity propels itself towards self-destruction.