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The Gizmo- The Heroes Quest by Nukegamerz
Nukegamerz
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*Ongoing* *Under heavy, but slow editing* The first novel in the series, "The Gizmo". *~* It is a fantasy book based on a Virtual Reality Massive Multiplayer Online Role Playing Game, or vrmmorpg game. The main character, Nuke suffers from a full body paralysis after a tragedy. But as a result of the ever-evolving technology, he's been promised a new body and future, on one condition. Putting on the Medicure Gizmo, he serves the rest of his life protecting the whole world from cyber destruction. What fate awaits this young yet unfortunate hero? Read on to find out! *~* #1 in worldscollide #1 in rugaparu #1 in @earnestycommunity's Weekly Award. Chapter 29 topic - Search for something (winning chapters were 15, 16 and 17) *~* (Updates aren't too slow) P.S. Characters in the book are drawn from other anime fandoms, but do not that this is an original, not a fanfiction book. Reviews-(Only the final conclusions have been added. Negative points pointed out are- vocabulary, punctuations which are being fixed at the moment) Reviewer lipsa- i like the opening scene the way you portray, it really is nice. As i keep on reading, i feel like im experiencing it on my own. The plot is a unique one and i like it. Reviewer xshadesoflife- the plot is amazing. Author has done justice with visualizing the story and thereafter presenting it in words. To present virtual reality in words is not an easy task but here, the author has done a commendable job. A review from the weekly awards by earnestycommunity- vocabulary is always important because as a writer it helps you to expand and learn new words in which it helps to contribute to the way you speak or write. You need to expand your vocabulary. Good job! Keep up your outstanding work
The Adventures of a Cosmic Girl: Vol. 1 by AmarlynOak
AmarlynOak
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Betty Barton has one goal, become a hero. To accomplish this goal she will have to learn how to work with a team, deal with a difficult partner, and learn to master her powers. Unfortunately for her dark powers are on the rise, and she isn't ready to face them alone.
Blood and Famine (Previously known as Ten) by ___Yoshi___
___Yoshi___
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Kate and Joseph knew one thing for sure; there were secrets far deadlier than the epidemic. Max knew one thing for sure; he was supposed to be dead two years ago. Nina knew one thing for sure; the royals couldn't be trusted. When Princess Kate and Prince Joseph were forced to leave the safety of their castle, they were faced with an ever growing number of problems. A virus, infamously known as the Spider-Virus, was lethal. Within days of contact, the host would be at the hands of death. However, the epidemic would soon be the least of their problems. Or maybe, it was just the beginning. _____________ MILESTONES First started writing: March 3, 2017 Finished first draft: February 18, 2022 Finished final draft: IN PROGRESS
I Loved My Girl by ___Yoshi___
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_________________ My girl thought the world was beautiful. I told her I thought so too... but I always lied when doing so. _________________ Highest Rankings: Ranked #85 in Twist
Ghost  by ___Yoshi___
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Highest Rankings: Ranked #311 in Ghost _________________________ *Cover made by SEASONIES*