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The Empty World | The Empty World Sequence [complete | rewriting] by KaranSeraph
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The Empty World is a 200K word darkly whimsical Fantasy novel, in the supernatural-protagonist tradition of The Sandman or The Vampire Chronicles, about a young daimon who watches over a muse after 'saving' her with a bottle of vampire blood and how they deal with the vampire who bottled that blood and its corrupting influence on the muse. Their story is a love-letter to Gothic subculture which explores issues of identity, agency, and accountability. [See extras at back of book for alternate pitches, blurbs, and summaries.] --- Rated 'M' for some references to substance abuse and scenes of drug use, a few explicit scenes of sexuality, occasional strong language, and vampire-related blood and violence. Warning: references to attempted suicide and 9/11. EDITING NOTICE: Book 1 of 2 is complete (through Ch 20) and in editing from Draft 2.5 to Draft 3. Book 2 of 2 is posted, but has some narrative gaps and is in editing from Draft 2/Draft 2.5 to Draft 3. NOTE: Draft 3 will be an *estimated* 150K-200K words when complete. SEQUENCE NOTICE: The Empty World was written after The Devil's Shadow, but is a macroquel, encompassing the timeline of the earlier work, and considered the anchor work of the sequence with tie-ins to several other works in its series. "Orchid" cover by author, incorporating illustrated elements used under CC0 license. See Extras at end of work for alternate covers. Playlist on YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLnT0bS83hioiSA_Vn595PLmt95D7jrWTb
Lucas ✔️ by bkypes
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*Completed but unedited* Lilith is haunted by ghouls; they pull her hair, hang from her clothes, and try to hurt her as often as possible. Lucas is a dark, mysterious stranger she keeps seeing around town. The thing is, no one knows who he is - let alone where he's from. The more Lilith is drawn to Lucas the harder it is to track him down. He runs hot and cold, constantly turning up and disappearing again. The closer they become, the less Lilith understands and the more the darkness crawls upon them both. It's not until Lilith loses everything that they realise their fates are tightly bound, with no chance for escape. Their story is foretold in the stars, in the past, in the future; and there's not a goddamn thing they can do about it. ______________________________________________________________________ "Sleep tight, Lilith," He said, his voice a mere whisper as he stepped away. "Wait," I said, my voice a lot louder, cutting through the night. "What's your name?" He paused, turning his head back to look at me, his dark eyes holding mine hostage again. "Lucas," He replied, a small smirk playing on his lips as he turned his head and continued walking, disappearing into the darkness of the street. Copyright © 2018 Brooke Kuipers #53 romance-friendship 11/05/18
The Crossing Destinies [OPEN Sonic the Hedgehog FF] by Witto150
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A priest, demon, and boy walk into the bar... Wait, this isn't a joke! Priest Shadow's peaceful life is disturbed by an increasing number of possessed people. During his midnight patrol, he finds mischievous boy Sonic, but at the same time, he senses a demon. Shadow has no choice but to send Sonic to his church while he heads deeper into an abandoned part of the town. However, dealing with a demon may be Shadow's least worry, as a terrible secret locked in his body resurfaces, turning his life upside down. With his secret out, he unknowingly lures a deadlier enemy who doesn't hesitate to use drastic measures to hold the priest in his cold, merciless grasp. One night changes all... Original AU: gaysilver.tumblr.com Rating: PG 14+, mention of blood, LIGHT gore, death, light swearing Help with the blurb: alysha40025201 --- THIS IS AN OPEN FANFICTION! NO FANDOM KNOWLEDGE REQUIRED! --- IF YOU ARE READING THIS STORY ON ANY OTHER PLATFORM OTHER THAN WATTPAD, YOU ARE VERY LIKELY TO BE AT RISK OF A MALWARE ATTACK. IF YOU WISH TO READ THIS STORY IN ITS ORIGINAL, SAFE FORM, PLEASE GO TO WATTPAD.COM. THANK YOU. --- AWARDS: Winning story in 12+ User-run Awards :-) --- TAGS: #GoldenRose2k18 #VogueAwards2018 #COWAwards2k18 #AEAwards2018 #GEOMETRICAWARDS2018 #PassionAwards #BurningPassionAwards2018 #BurningAwards2018 #Centric_Awards #thecosmicawards2019 #WAPAwards #TheUnicornAwards #RebelWars #thewinterawards #Summerbookawards #thehollowawards2018 #tta2018 #TalentAwards2018 #projectdiscoveryourtalent #TheCreativeMindsAwards #spotlight1819 #pastelawards2k17 #brawa ---
The Last Philosopher: Part One by NickfEast
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11x featured wattpad story. Before everything, it's assumed there was nothing, but what if there was no real difference between the two? Just two extreme philosophies from the first conflict. The planet Huom has been under observation for longer than should technically be possible. The primary watcher, a bitter black hole, is excited to see that there is finally a proverbial Darkness at the end of the tunnel. Meanwhile, on the planet, in the freezing mountains of Empris, Lyeasrakardsul, the oldest living sorcerer, suffers from devastating nightmares. At the same time, far away in the sandstone desert of Zenon, Herschel, a man filled to the brim with weird ideas is escaping a prison filled with strange old men. What does all this have to do with arsehole Gods, hairy Dwarfs, frustrated Afreets, curious Knomes, lizard-women, and nude Áettar? Perhaps Nothing, perhaps Everything... but why can't it be both?