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Training To Be A Jackass | ✓ by Adairx
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|WATTYS 2021 Shortlisted| ❝Teach me.❞ ❝Teach you what?❞ ❝Teach me how to be a bad boy.❞ Elias Rodriguez has a crush on a certain cheerleader (since forever), but she has a thing for bad boys, not chemistry nerds. Lucky for him, the cheerleader's best friend offers to coach him on how to be one. Will it work out for him or will he find love in an unlikely place? Only time will tell. ──────🌟────── Featured in YA reading list. Featured in StoriesUndiscovered reading list (September2020 & November2021). Featured in Romance reading list. Featured in GeneralFiction reading list. Featured in Humor reading list.
Six Books Reviews by randrew934
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STILL OPEN!!! I have participated in so many awards as a judge. Also, my books have been submitted to many awards. So I think, I understand what's expected grammatically, plot-wise and the general outlook of how to arrange each chapter, plot-twists, drama to pick the interests of your readers and keep them glued to their chairs. But! This is not a replacement for a professional editor or an editing tool like Grammarly. I am not a paragon of literature knowledge. I do have my days-annoying typos and wrong use of adjectives. So regard me your humble beta-reader. A review book like no other with a chance of winning BOOK OF MONTH and its exciting gifts.
Atlas Wept by neveratlast
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Cancer. That's what doctors had diagnosed him with. After this shocking revelation, it was as if Atlas, the Titan who held up the world, shrugged for a moment, leaving Oliver's life in shambles. Oliver's friends, wanting to do what they could for their best friend, made a bucket list for him and set out on the adventure of a lifetime, bringing him to the Netherlands. Things go hilariously wild on their trip to fulfil Ollie's bucket list, with them stumbling into unbelievable and insane situations. The final lap of Ollie's life. From being stranded in the middle of the freezing highway with no winter clothing to being locked out of their motel room and being forced to sleep in their battered rental car, their little jaunt in the Netherlands is one they won't forget anytime soon. At last, Atlas wept. He wept tears of joy for the dying boy who learnt how to live. This trip may be forgotten over time, but Oliver Henri Hartman won't ever be forgotten. That's a fact.
Smoke and Mirrors by UrabonHeilemann
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It is the year 2019 in human time calculation. The continent of Maranurr, home of the Elves has been occupied by the humans for the better part of the last 200 Years, for their large coal, steel and oil deposits. Elves like Kyu Ptaha and Garel Hyari struggle for survival in the apartheid-like society of the Maranurrian capital. Kyu's life changes when she finds the mysterious, amnesiac boy called Sage. The human boy speaks the anchient tongue of the first Elves, from 12,000 years ago and despite his lack of memories, seems to have some peculiar knowledge of the Elven lore. In the coming weeks the boy turns the young Elf-girls world on her head and she and her friends are thrust into a world of forgotten magic, dangerous international politics and a potentially world-ending prophecy.
What Heroes Don't Think About by SheWhoLovesPineapple
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Didi was born to a villain who taught her to seek power above all, but raised by books that taught her about more important things: friendship, justice, and pretty boys. When she and her brother Dominic run away from their mother and her cult, Didi sees it as her chance to be the hero she always wanted to be. But the road to heroism is neither well-lit nor smoothly-paved. And in real life, it's a lot harder than in books to discern between right and wrong, and friends and foes. Sometimes it seems that being a hero means there are some things she has to just not think about. Like, her employer having an underground torture chamber. And her brother, her closest confidant, suddenly lying to her face all the time. And how she still has seven younger siblings at the mercy of her mother, and absolutely no idea how to save them. An open fanfiction set in the world of the Forgotten Realms. Updates twice a month.
Children of the Archangels by BronxCrusader
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Nineteen-year-old Luke Sanchez was doing well at college until demons showed up at his campus and possessed his girlfriend. Luckily he solved that problem with a special ability only he possessed: to summon fire from the palm of his hand. The gift was granted to him by the archangel Uriel, one of the seven archangels in Christianity who adopt mentally stagnated children and imbue them with special powers. However, Luke needed to know more about his heritage, so when the opportunity arrived to study at an academy for his kind up in the Rocky Mountains, he took it, leaving his friends, school, family, and the love of his life behind. He learns that mentally distracted children can only unlock the power within them at the cost of their innocence. And when he gets chosen by the school to carry out a dangerous mission to the Garden of Eden to help "save" a mentally lost child, he encounters monstrous creatures, demons, turned angels, and a betrayal that puts his new school's safety in jeopardy. *** This story is complete! Ranked #11 in Catholic Category Genres: Young Adult Fantasy, Paranormal (Angels & Demons), Adventure Rated: PG-13 for Language and Mild Violence (It'll be a movie inside your head) If you have any interest in angels and demons, Christianity, super powers, Hogwarts, the Hunger Games, or Percy Jackson, then you're going to love this story. ******** This publication may not be reproduced, stored, or transmitted in any form or by any means without the expressed written consent of the author L. A. Rivera. This is a work of fiction. All characters, organizations, events, and places portrayed in this work are either products of the author's imagination or are used fictitiously.
Saga of a New World I - (Audiobook Available) by LKrahn
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Who will stand in this new world of magic and technology... and who will fall? The end of the world comes as a surprise and as one world ends, another begins. Transformed by a magical apocalypse that ends civilization as we know it, Astrid awakens in a world filled with monsters, magic and the remains of modern technology. Together with other survivors, she will have to find her family and figure out how to survive in this new world. #2 in Apocalypse during September 2019 Now available as an audiobook on Google Books, YouTube and Spotify: Google Books: https://play.google.com/store/audiobooks/details/Louis_Krahn_Saga_of_a_New_World?id=AQAAAEDcKUBpjM Spotify: https://open.spotify.com/album/1rN2GevN1wQThxsx1nnQ9p?si=SYCjx9AmQlyifXpcIq9uQQ YouTube: https://youtube.com/playlist?list=PLW2F662LP09Xf4rv-Kdm84DHsXJIwmg6N I hope you enjoy this story and would appreciate any feedback. Eine Deutsche Übersetzung findet ihr hier: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/194956247-saga-einer-neuen-welt-eine-post-apockalyptische
Sakura Eyes by naeomiiii
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When I was a child, I used to think the monsters Mom used to tell me in her fairytale stories were scary. But now that I've seen the real world, I've realized humans are much scarier. There's an evil king turning innocent people into demons, villages literally dying from lack of resources, and the only way to solve this is an eighteen year old girl who doesn't even know her real identity yet. Well, that's going to change real soon because unless the world wants an army of controlled demons ruling the world, someone's got to stand up. Cover: @LadySnowdrop [HIATUS]
Elysia: Ignite [Elysia Trilogy Book 1] (EDITING) ✔ by SkyeSweven
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♧Featured on Wattpad's Fresh Reads List♧ One wasted night, a man who had fled from home finds himself at gunpoint. The wielder of the silver revolver is a mysterious thief named Jessica who threatens him that should he, Erik, not follow her to the last paradise city existing in the Wasteworld, she would put a bullet through his head. And so their perilous journey to Elysia begins. Erik and Jessica meet friends that accompany them on their adventure but also inevitably falls into traps of those who antagonize them. Twisted obsession, evil ex, gunshot wounds, and heinous raiders-you name it. At last, a group of quirky eight forms and starts to resemble a team. Unlikely as they may be, the group go forth to cross the North American continent in search of the supposed city of everlasting bliss. However, there is one thing that they are not aware of...unbeknownst to the naive eight, a great conspiracy is being crafted against them. Who is 'Eden'? And is what awaits them in Elysia? [Cover Art & Edit by Skye Sweven] [Inside Illustrations by Gabby and @devilking_222 on Twitter]
Wielders: Protectors of the Realms by ChloeShepherd810
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The Universe was a terrifying pit of darkness, a gaping hole in reality without an ending. Despite the emptiness, there was a tiny glimmer of light that dare burst through. The light was the spark to ignite a magical core, the very essence of one's soul. Light rose to meet the darkness, as equals in the cosmic universe. Thus, the Four Magicks were crafted: Light, Reality, Darkness, and Soul. With the harmonious elemental union of Dark and Light, something new was created-The Wielder. He was the first of humanity, blessed with the powers of the Four. Their essence rippled through him and as other beings were born, the Four's essence dispersed amongst the universe, with various planets filled with magical users. Rarely could users possess more than one specialization in the Four. No one-Except the Wielder. And as it always does, the time for universal peace ended with the descent into chaos. The Wielder did the only thing he could to stop the spread of darkness, cleave the universe and his own soul into two different halves. ~~~~ WIELDERS SOCIALS: Insta: @wielders_ Facebook: @wielders_