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Free by CraZee_SiCky
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I Have Lived by Sleeping_At_Last
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"If we only die once, I want to die with you. If we only live once, I want to live with you." Some people find it hard to believe that Thissaly Grace was looking for love. She seemed like the type of girl that only cared about her future goals, which did not include a man. They were right, but half of her heart yearned for a man’s love. As a senior in high school, Thissaly knew that she could not be distracted by a man. Her future came first before everything else. That did not stop her from wanting love, though. “Selfish. You are so selfish!” Her last boyfriend had told her as she slammed the door in his face. When it came to her studies, Thissaly did not care if she was selfish. It was her future, how could she not be selfish? How could she not want the best for herself? If he did not want her to succeed, then she had no place for him in her life. Thissaly laughed at the memory of his face when she had told him that she would rather study than have sex with him. She had a major exam the next morning and she wanted to make sure she was ready. He could not see how she could brush him off to study, so she showed him the door. Thissaly was reminded again and again that men only wanted one thing and they didn’t give two shits about what happened the next day. She was disappointed over and over, but she still didn’t let up hope. There had to be someone out there that had the same mindset as herself. Who knew that person would be a wrestler? Certainly not Thissaly Grace. Being a manager for her high school’s wrestling team was Thissaly’s only time to have fun. The wrestlers were her brothers, the other managers her sisters, and the coaches her fathers. They were her family, her only family. However, it could all change just by a small lie. Well maybe not that small… Ok it is a very huge lie! But who cares? Oh yeah. Everyone!
The Promise of Forever (Book One: Part One) - PUBLISHED! by NayaRS
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***Published and available on Amazon in both paperback and Kindle versions*** Kindle: http://amzn.com/B00K6YZEXI Paperback: http://www.amazon.com/Promise-Forever-Book-One-Part/dp/1499192347/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8 Trinity is fragile, broken and far from perfect. Abuse and many disorders have left her in the system that is almost as flawed as Trinity believes she is. The lack of love and long list of imperfections leave little room for her to believe that anyone, including God, can love her. Then something happens. They meet, and he instantly understands that she needs more help than most are willing to offer. She is deluded into thinking only of her missteps. He is trying to show her a new light... to give her that help. She pushes, but he persists. Trinity tries to resist the dangers of love. But what happens when the seemingly perfect stranger offers her a promise? And not just any promise. The Promise of Forever. Description written by @love_dance_live and @NayaRS.
Chained (Editing dont read) by breadsticksbella
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In the corrupt world Abby lives in, things are difficult. Teenagers and children are taken at random, sent to an unfamiliar place called the Chain. In the Chain, they are forced into having a procedure which will determine whether they are good, or bad. After Abby is deemed bad, it is said that she must be executed. In order to escape her terrible fate, she must transform her identity into a girl who is good. She must live amongst the good, and train to be a killer like all that are good must do. But what happens when the mysterious boy, Alex, discovers who she is? What happens when Abby discovers what being bad makes her capable of? And most importantly, how will Abby survive in a place like the Chain? Read to find out.
Tabula Rasa by Inkyvision
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Lia, a depressed girl, is trapped into a world where communicating with others may lead to a horrible death. With her determination to heal will she be able to overcome the world where her fears will come to life?
The Trouble with Love by JJJiangx
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❝The higher you go, the harder you fall.❞ Elena Evans has always been the observer. No one notices her, but she sees everything. The Elite. Beautiful, spoiled, exclusive. The richest families in the world- they don't let just anyone in. When Elena is asked to make one of them fall in love with her, she figures it's just a stupid game. But the Elite have secrets- and Elena isn't the first one to play their game. [The Elite Series #1] [Wattys2014 Winner: Talk Of The Town Award]
Twenty shades of blu by ChrizzyJay
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As a blue eyed black girl with different personalities Blu feels like she's all alone and no one understands her until she meets Jonas a boy who can change all that and helps her see that being different is sometimes fun and rewarding. Except when you're Blu.
The Scroll of Terusca by takemetoparisx
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Second to only her father, skilled hunter Emeline Saunders is admired by all and feared by many. However, when a strange man demands that she hand over the powerful Scroll of Terusca, she must track down the pieces of the scroll before it's too late. Accompanied by the village's Wise One and a mysterious and amusing boy named Cedar, can she make it in time? Or will the land be forced into the horrible fate that awaits it? . Copyright 2014 All Rights Reserved. Background Image credits to rightful owner. A big thank you to @abandonedsapphire for helping with the summary (:
The Trance by PROXY001
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Set in the future of 2046, a man named Mr. Johansson, works at a secret government facility in which they imprison millions of citizens and send their minds into a 1938 digital world known as. . . . . . . . . ”The Trance”; to send subliminal messages, so that way the people will be under the government’s control. Mr. Johansson wants to escape, however he cannot, both legally AND physically. So now Mr. Johansson wants to find out what “The Trance” really is, and why the government wants control of its people. He’ll do anything, by any means necessary. . .without realizing the severity of his crime.
Audrey Hepburn's Pearls: Part I by SumireHime
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Part one of two. In 1967, George was the legendary Georgina Monroe, the best Marilyn Monroe drag impersonator New York City had ever seen. But in 1994, George is a recluse who is scared of everyone and everything. Enter Ruiz, a young Latina pageant drag queen known as Audrey the Ritz, famous for her Audrey Hepburn impersonation. Since she was fourteen, she had admired Georgina Monroe's career obsessively, always wondering about why she disappeared so suddenly. During a chance encounter, Ruiz gets to meet George, and through a gentle friendship and a strong bond, Ruiz starts to uncover a story she never could have imagined in her worst nightmares. Stories of the mob, glamour, love, heartbreak, addiction, murder,and intensely dangerous secrets abound in this lgbt novel about ever present issues that pervade throughout time. Told through voices young and old, we follow the story of Georgina and Ruiz as witnesses to truths that are rarely told.
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