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An Ember Bright by ayo723
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"The sound of glass shattering. The screams of terror and pain. All hell breaks loose." Cara lives in a world where she is deemed lesser because she isn't an Aurelian. Aurelians dominate the kingdom of Serola - and the world. They are the only ones able to wield powers and therefore claim their place as the rulers. Cara's questionable and uncertain past causes her to harbor a deep resentment for them, and she is determined never to fall into their grasp. However, she finds herself in the lion's den when a tragedy causes her to reveal secrets she herself didn't know she kept. Cara ends up in a place that forces her to relive some of her most traumatizing memories. With each passing day, she is given more than one reason to sleep with one eye open. As Cara spends more time surrounded by her enemies, she unearths shocking information about everything she knows, and everything she is. ~ 1st Place Unknown Author in The Blue Rose Awards August 2018 ~ ~ Fantasy Judge's Pick in The Magic Awards 2018 ~ ~ 2nd Place Fantasy in Net Monthly Awards September 2018 ~ ~ Best Plot Fantasy in Net Monthly Awards September 2018 ~ #BurningAwards #BurningPassionAwards
The Princess & the Thief by Electrumditches
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Ket is a thief, mistress of disguise and con artist. Katrina is a princess on her way to get married to a man she hates. Although their lives couldn't be more different, their faces are alike enough that they could be mistaken for twins. When their paths collide, Ket takes advantage of their physical similarities and assumes Katrina's identity. The plan is to infiltrate the palace of Oblyan, land herself in the good graces of the royal family, convince them to pardon her uncle, who has been sentenced to death for conspiring against the crown, and get the hell out. However, nothing is ever that simple. Soon Ket finds herself cut off from her friends and allies, backed into a corner by Katrina's suspicious relatives and wrapped up in more conspiracies than you can shake a stick at. To make matters worse, she discovers herself engaged to the charming but dangerous prince Aklos, who doesn't quite understand how his fiancée went from a soulless demon to a girl he nearly likes, but isn't above taking advantage. Ket resigns herself to putting up with Aklos for as long as the charade lasts. However, as time drags by, she begins to grow unsure of her own feelings for him - even knowing that there can be no future for a relationship built on deceit. (Very, VERY loosely based on Mark Twain's The Prince and the Pauper.)
30 Hours With You [Completed]  by brookeallyson254
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Highest Ranking: #16 in ChickLit :) Thea and Ellis meet the night before Ellis is going to leave to study abroad in Europe. They have 30 hours together before their lives take them in opposite directions. Thea and Ellis share secrets every hour, wander New York City after hours, and do not waste a second of the time they have together. Is it possible to fall in love in a day? **story is told by hours not chapters. All chapters are here :)**
Honor [A Mulan Retelling](First Draft) by EisenMadchen
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In the heart of Japan during wartime, Akira-Lee Yuki wants to bring honor to her family. She is not one to think of marrying, but if that brings honor, so be it. Only thing is, she has a problem that tosses her honor out the window. To restore it, she joins the men's army to help her country in a time of need, though, women were not permitted to battle. That would bring honor, right? Highest Ranking: #449 in Action! 10/04/2016. Winner of Le Book Award for Best Action/Adventure and Le Book Award for Rising Star! Winner of the WIA one year awards in first place for Action! Winner of the Fiction Genres Unite Awards for Best Action! 1st place winner in the Action category of the Shoot for the Stars Awards! 2nd place winner for Action in the True Color Awards! 2nd place winner in the Phoenix Awards! 3rd place winner of the Undiscovered Writers Awards in Action! Featured on @Undiscoveredbooks and @_Once_Upon reading lists! Copyright 2016 Beautiful cover by @AAKhan!
Heart of Darkness by Sh_x_dow
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A War Between the Dark and the Light is set to erupt. The Academy was founded by several elementals. They guarded the Light fiercely, and sought to bring fire on all of the Dark. Emilie was a child with a mysterious heritage and a dark past. She was the key, with the power to either destroy or preserve all she loved and hated. Emilie, terrified of her destructive powers fled the Light and ended up in the clutches of the Dark. The Academy hunts for her too, seeking to persuade or destroy her to preserve peace. Stranded in the middle, she finds herself at the center of a ruthless war, a battle to destroy Zacarias from within. Traitors and spies lurk at every turn, each more desperate than the next to use Emilie's newfound powers for their own dark purposes. Where would she run? Graphics Credit To: @winterinheaven Thank You!
The Guy Who Called Me An A-class Bitch  by Hersheys_1602
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"Well, because she's an A-class bitch." He replied, casually, like calling random girls a bitch was nothing too unusual. Cass gasped. "How can you say that? Do you have any idea what she does to guys who call her a bitch, wait no, didn't you also do that to the guy who called you ugly?" "Well, in the restaurant she was screaming at the both of us actually, thereby creating a scene, which doesn't exactly give a good person vibe off her. And the answer to your second question will be: I'd like to see her try." He explained, looking at me with a look of pure disgust. "Shut up." I yelled, loud enough for him to hear. Who did this guy think he was? I paid for his, Okay, their fucking dinner at eleven P.M. The least he could do was be polite to me or just shut up entirely. "And if I choose not to?" He questioned, looking amused. He's as good as dead then. -*-*-*-*-*-*-*-* Jessica Walkers was just your everyday counsellor, nothing out of the blue. Her past...let's just not go into that. Her present, now that we can talk about. She had decided to live as a bachelorette for the rest of her useless life. But is it that simple when your old crush comes back and also when you've kissed your best friend's boyfriend, accidentally of course? I don't think so. It wasn't simple. She had to deal with the guy who called her an A class bitch. Without falling for his charm. NOT A BADBOY - NERD STORY. I REPEAT NOT A BADBOY - NERD STORY NOTE: The word 'cause' which is supposed to be written as 'cause is spelled as cause' throughout the story. I'll try changing it. WARNING : STORY WRITTEN BY ME WHEN I WAS A LOT MORE IMMATURE. READ AT YOUR OWN RISK.
Oblivion Age by Hungerkittens
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The world of Attack on Titan was thrown into a world of near human extinction. After the attack on Shiganshina, humans were thrown closer against the brink of human extinction. The end of the human race was nearing, thousands of citizens military were dying every day from food shortages or Titans. Rena Hara possesses magical abilities and is humanity's last hope. Can she help save the human race? Or will everyone perish at her hands?
Annalise-The Broken Bond by strangerstale
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"I told you to stay away from her." Eric's voice was calm-too calm. "You should've listened to your parents, Cristian. Now you'll learn what happens to dogs who play with bones that don't belong to them." "She's not your property," Cristian snapped, venom lacing every word. "Now let her go." Eric's low chuckle slithered through the air just before his fist drove into Cristian's gut. The hit knocked the wind from him, forcing a grunt from deep in his chest. He doubled over, coughed once, then straightened with a growl that rumbled like thunder. Moonlight caught the flash of his canines as he bared his teeth. "That all you got?" ☆☆☆ Caught between duty and desire, Annalise faces a choice that could cost her everything. Bound by the traditions of her pack, Annalise has spent her life walking the line between obedience and freedom. But that fragile balance shatters when she's promised to the impulsive future alpha whose anger hides the same helplessness she feels as both of their lives are decided for them. As the weight of an unwanted engagement crushes her spirit, a shocking confession from her best friend ignites a storm of forbidden emotions. Love, loyalty, and legacy collide, forcing Annalise to confront the truth about her heart-and the dark secrets her pack has buried for years. In a world where betrayal runs as deep as blood, Annalise must decide whether to follow her heart... or the path her people demand.