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Reboot by MangosandMangos
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Scavenging electronics from a post apocalyptic Toronto is what Sara does best, caring for an outcast child while doing it? Not so much. But Sara's limits will be tested even more when she explores a flooded basement in a sky-rise and finds a secret that's been 'inactive' for 40 years.
Inheritance - The Dark Sorcerers: Book 1 by IromaVP
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As a Dark Sorceress who has lived a lie her entire life, Kenna will have to decide whether the world she is desperately trying to save hasn't been doomed all along. *** Kenna has lived in the Monastery for as long as she can remember. Raised by the White Sisters as one of their own, she has always assumed she would eventually become a Sister herself. However, a few days before Kenna's eighteenth birthday, the Head Sister tells her that she is in fact a Dark Sorceress: a witch with the unusual ability to control Darkness and Death. Despite the nature of her own powers, Kenna discovers that she is destined to defeat the Darkness which is taking over her world, a destiny that sets her on a quest to find out who she is and what she's capable of. Accompanied by a charming bodyguard, she embarks on a journey that makes her question everything she has ever believed in. As the Darkness is growing inside her, Kenna will have to make a choice. Will she deny her true identity and continue down the path of the Light? Or will she fulfill another, darker part of her destiny that no one dares to talk about? /COMPLETED/ ----- #2nd in Fantasy - The Winner Awards 2020 FEATURED ON @adventure Fantastical Adventures reading list FEATURED ON @StoriesUndiscovered Explore The Stars reading list FEATURED ON @TheWarriorGoddess Fantastical Warriors reading list FEATURED ON @YAFantasy Dark Fantasy reading list FEATURED ON @WattWitches The Young and The Wicked reading list REVIEWS "Inheritance is a gripping and beautiful tale of magic, responsibility, and action. A truly fantastic story filled to the brim with action, a completely unique and entertaining plot, and relatable characters." @InHaze
New World by A_Darken_soul
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New World, a novel telling the story of Anthony, a young boy who woke up with nothing but the clothes on his back, his name, and a single goal in mind: "Stay alive... Find the truth." He is discovered by a mysterious yet trustworthy man who had been waiting for his arrival. Jay, a man clad in the same midnight as his hair, and with a beast-like gash running down his right eye. Despite the painful history behind such a scar; his scarlet eyes continued to burn bright with passion and rage. Anthony and Jay were both granted immeasurable power, and with the help of Ace, Jay's trusty steed, our heroes set out into a journey that will test and push them past all mortal limits. Although, they never seem to be alone in this cruel world. The help of many friends that Jay calls family will always be near in their journey. How far will they need to go? Will Jay and Anthony be enough to protect this world, or will the wonders of this world prove to be almighty, and take everything they fought for.
LOVE ME, A SIREN by TalesWithTana
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☂ FORMERLY FEATURED @ Paranormal from August 2nd, 2019 - 2021 & FORMERLY FEATURED @ Mystery from April 23rd, 2019 - November 14th, 2019 & ☂ ♭ A YA/NA paranormal novel with mystery-thriller elements that tells an epic love story! ♭ Perfect for fans of The Vampire Diaries, Elite & Tidelands "What happens when three Sirens strand into the small fishers town of Sweet River? Can the young men resist such cruel beauty or do they fall hard?" Sweet River, a small town known for its ancient pirate stories, nowadays more like a town full of fishermen. A place to be for anyone who enjoys the sea and the fresh air floating through their hair. Jackson Smith, an about to be senior high school student, is thinking about his future while taking a beach walk with his dog Terry during his last day of summer break at night. He isn't that excited about his final year like Nathan and Joe Royce. Jackson finds it hard to tell his friends he will be staying here in Sweet River with his uncle Sam to work in the fish industry like any other Smith man did. He accepts his faith, forever in Sweet River where life is deadly normal. While walking back home, Jackson spots three girls around his age who he has never seen before. He finds them mysterious, especially the one with her beautiful brown eyes. He is lost while looking at them, looking at her. There is something about her. Who are they? More importantly who is she? ☂ Rankings ☂ ▪# 21 2019undiscovered1k - April 2nd, 2020 ▪# 55 sirens - April 19th, 2019 ▪#367 mermaid - April 25th, 2019 ▪#9 beautifulcreatures - April 2nd, 2020 ▪# 23 thewattys2019 - April 2nd, 2020 _________________________________________________ ♡ 'LOVE ME, A SIREN' gets updated monthly on the 10th! ♡ © All Rights Reserved. This means no one can repost, copy, modify or just generally use it without my permission. See my profile for more!
Tears' Curse by LindaLsc
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"Why do we need to protect the mortals? They no longer trust us!" "Because this is our oath." Xue Er, a 1000-year-old white dragon from Long Sheng Jie has been sent to the current mortals' world to protect it from evil forces. Living under the name of Miracle, she begins her journey. But because mortals no longer believe in the existence of dragons, she cannot use her elements as much as she wishes to. When she thought she finally saved a mortal from becoming the fourth victim, things turn more complicated as she learns the truth behind her birth. What exactly is going on? Will Miracle be able to complete her mission in the world of mortality? Or will she be the next death of her species? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- -(••÷ 🎀 𝒜𝒸𝒽𝒾𝑒𝓋𝑒𝓂𝑒𝓃𝓉𝓈 🎀 ÷••(- 2020 -) Gem-ers Awards (1𝔰𝔱 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 2𝔫𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 The Belle Ame Awards (2𝔫𝔡 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 2𝔫𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 The Zodiac Awards 2020, 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 2𝔫𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 Library Awards 2020, 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 2𝔫𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 Paper Awards, (1𝔰𝔱 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 3𝔯𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 The High Peaks Awards (1𝔰𝔱 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 3𝔯𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 SilverLavender Awards (1𝔰𝔱 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 3𝔯𝔡 𝔭𝔩𝔞𝔠𝔢 The Creory Awards (1𝔰𝔱 𝔢𝔡𝔦𝔱𝔦𝔬𝔫), 𝔉𝔞𝔫𝔱𝔞𝔰𝔶 𝔴𝔦𝔫𝔫𝔢𝔯, 3𝔯𝔡
Beyond by orchards
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❝Lyra observed that her tendency to lash out at ignorant villagers had been rapidly decreasing as she focused her energy on training. The hurtful words the villagers threw about so casually around her, or the disapproving looks they gave her as she walked about minding her own business now bothered her less than they used to. Instead of wallowing in her misery or accepting her fate, Lyra vowed to restore the honor of the Fain family name.❞ - A tale about bravery, dragons, and discovering the unknown. Co-written by Aleksandra Sloniewski and Agraj Rathi