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The Parallel Shift by demystify
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After Professor Chris Reid crossed the portal to another Parallel Universe, he gained the ability to control space and time. However, a dark figure followed him and threatened to destroy the balance of his reality. Only Chris could stop him there is only one way. To find Dana Clarke.
Mystical (Mystical #1) (Revising) by ArielleWeekly
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Gentle ripples passed over her, a watery caress that contrasted with her growing unease. Blinking slowly, Eliza tried to make sense of her situation. She found herself submerged, an unexpected aquatic world unfolding around her. Panic crept in as her ankles remained bound, immobilized as if by an unseen force. An attempt to move her arms yielded no results - they were ensnared in an unyielding grip. Seaweed, sinuous and trailing, wrapped itself around her legs with an almost possessive hold. Every movement was thwarted by the constricting tendrils, her struggles mirrored by the rippling sea plants. An urgency to breathe set in, her chest tightening in a desperate plea for air. But the very element that should sustain her had become a stifling barrier. A strand of slimy seaweed clung to her lips, smothering her mouth and nose. It seemed as if the water itself had turned against her, a sinister transformation that threatened to consume her.
Glorify Bad (ON HOLD) by Bambs1409
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Supernatural Mystery/Thriller (Contains minor sexual content, language, and occasional murder.) "You know, this is who we are. This is who you are." he would end the night with. "Somethin' out there-" he would point among the lights of constellation. "put us here for a reason. We got to find that reason." After introverted, seventeen year old Caleb Tucker moves into the family inherited home in a Northern Michigan town called Avelak with his older sister, Elsie, Caleb comes to the realization that the death of his Great Uncle Clyde has enabled him to possibly live a normal life without his 'spiritual body.' Caleb soon learns that he is not the only one in this small town with a supernatural ability; he meets the infamous, snobbish and astoundingly handsome Maximilian Finch who is a Dhampir in transition and Nora Pennington; a bullied yet bold psychic who has dreams of flickered visions of the future. When two students from their high school go missing, its up to the trio to trace the unwelcomed killer in this once tranquil town.
Bonafide Intentions by Flarinsr
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A lone man, a string of disappearances in a remote valley currently in the midst of a Raging blizzard. This is a small intro of a story I had laying around, I work full time restaurant hours and go to college so please be understanding about updates. I literally work, eat, sleep, study. That being said, if there is a demand for more, I will supply. All it takes is a vote or a quick comment.