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Rise of The Conquest by GabrielArevalo19
GabrielArevalo19
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When his daughter and son-in-law are brutally murdered, Master Zo vows to do anything to keep his grandson, Spark, safe. He teaches Spark how to fight, defend himself, and helps him increase his stamina, speed, and agility. When another child, Ace, falls from the sky, he joins in this regime and the two become brothers. They grow stronger together, locked away from the world in their remote cabin. But a meteor hits Earth infusing the boys with new abilities, just in time to save Earth from a race of aliens intent on destroying humanity. As the boys embark on their new journey, they meet three people with similar powers and the five become a team. While the brothers fight to save their planet, they have magical, but very different experiences along the way. One will find love and friendship, while the other falls into a trap of anger and power. Can their bond survive the war or will their years of training and friendship be for nothing?
BRIBE ME by thegapinthedoor
thegapinthedoor
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Hustling for Spectre Corp was supposed to be 𝙇𝘼𝙐𝙍𝘼 𝙍𝘼𝙄𝙉 's dream job - until God gleefully threw a wrench in the works. The wrench. 𝘾𝙃𝘼𝙍𝙇𝙄𝙀 𝙎𝙋𝙀𝘾𝙏𝙍𝙀. Blue-eyed heir to a British billionaire, here to kill Laura's career. Until the silver-tongued devil struck her a sly deal. This is like all those other billionaire stories. Except it's not. 𝗪𝗔𝗥𝗡𝗜𝗡𝗚: 𝗘𝗫𝗣𝗟𝗜𝗖𝗜𝗧 𝗖𝗢𝗡𝗧𝗘𝗡𝗧 𝗔𝗛𝗘𝗔𝗗 ♡ 𝗥𝗔𝗡𝗞𝗜𝗡𝗚𝗦 1st Place in Coffee After Dark Awards, Romance #2 in Mature-romance #3 in Satirical #4 in Bribe Note: British English. Don't @ me.
My Alien Boyfriend by Srithijha013
Srithijha013
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Sarah's life has been complicated since childhood. She never expected it to be more complicated until she knew what he was. He stayed away, but he was falling for her each time he pushed her away. Knowing what he was, Sarah couldn't accept the thought of their ending forever.
Solace & Taproots by CheerflNihilstTatrTt
CheerflNihilstTatrTt
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On Black Friday in 2015, a bioterrorist releases a plague in NYC that leads to societal collapse. Months later, a former college student in urban Virginia tries to find her new place and new people at a settlement of survivors rebuilding their lives, reflects on the rough road that got her there, and helps apply boot to ass of those would would endanger it all. This story is only loosely set in the world of Tom Clancy's The Division, and requires no game knowledge to read. This story focuses on the lives of normal, "regular" people, potential imaginary NPCs in the original universe. This is a fan work only, all copyrights belong to original owners. Total length 101k words, sequel in progress.