Eminence-in-shadow Stories

Boros from One Punch Man Vs Shadow, aka Cid Kageou from Eminence in Shadow, having a death battle, but I wrote it. Its essentially "what if shadow instead of getting sent where he did by the black rose got sent to the ship of Dark Matter's Pirates". Let me know what yall think of my writing style i can improve it for my novel series im working on!