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There is so very much to Legea. This is a book for all the extras that belong nowhere: music, maps, poems, random lore, fun facts, the very first draft of "The Journey"... written four years ago by a thirteen-year-old in a ring-bound notebook with a snake on the cover...

"I can't live with myself. I want to forget." In a world where humans have existed over a billion years, higher beings called gods and goddesses roam. Meet Death, the cold, slightly introverted god who has had a crush on Life for the past 750 million years. He knows she will never reciprocate, but loves her anyway. After having his heart broken by her unwittingly over and over again, he is finally presented a chance to get closer to her, but as their relationship develops, he realizes that the secrets he keeps from her could very well rip her apart and tear her away from him forever. Friendship is supposed to be built on love and trust, not secrets and lies. What happens when the brutal truth shreds reality? Amazing cover made by @sun-tan-aka, thank you! ----- #232 in Fantasy... wow! Thanks guys :D

The world of fae is crueler than it seems, the Court struggling to maintain their grip on the wild places of the human realm as industry swells and devours the forests and meadows. The time is fast approaching for drastic measures, and the Fae have little sympathy for those without their magic. A young boy plays with his friends in the woods as something dark lurks in the trees nearby. Unbeknownst to him he lives between two worlds, belonging to both and neither. A vow made years ago threatens to sway him one way or the other- only time can reveal the choice he will make. Author's Note: My 2017 NaNoWriMo rewritten for my 2022 NaNoWriMo! But this time I've planned more? And woah! What is this? NaNoWriMo 2023 as well??!!??!

Dipper thought he'd seen the last of Bill Cipher after Weirdmageddon, and he was perfectly happy never seeing a triangle again. But one day everything changes, and after an alternate version of Bill turns up at the Mystery Shack he finds himself racing to defeat a mysterious threat before Gravity Falls is destroyed. (Gravity Falls belongs to Alex Hirsch. I only own the plot and some of the characters. This is my first fanfic so the characterisation might not be accurate.)

「What happens when two girls go missing and wake up in an unfamiliar house? Will they find their way out...alive? Who do they meet along the way, and what secrets do they uncover?」 ◈ 『First Draft; irregular updates』 ◈ NOTE: This is a re-written version of the original. There may be changes to the plot and not everything will be the same as the first version. That being said, I don't know yet what the final outcome of this story will look like, so let's all see how it turns out together. NOW BEING CROSSPOSTED ONTO AO3

Ivy is a lonely little girl who comes across an animal in the pet store and decides to take it home with her. From the beginning, the pet is in awe of her. However, everything changes when the pet is blinded by greed for freedom.

"I'm just a prissy girl with a prissy attitude that wants to kill something." Lyra Lynch knows something's going on, everyone who's survived know's something's going on. But no one knows what. Something happened, and it keeps spreading throughout the world. People are affected. Humans are monsters and survivors are killers, the world is upside down. Everything is dark, and of the candles burning inside, is there even one left?

Selcouth's life is not going according to plan. At thirty she's single, out of a job and her only joy is talking to her herb garden while downing a pint of beer. When Selcouth receives a mysterious package filled with a single key from Risa, her deceased caretaker, she jumps on a plane to Scotland. Living in New York should have prepared her for everything but when Selcouth reaches Edinburgh she is greeted by mercurial weather, monsters and a philandering alchemist named Fionn. She knows her life will never be the same. AUTHOR'S NOTE: Thank you for taking the time to read my work in progress. Please feel free to write comments, it's my first draft so any feedback is welcomed and greatly appreciated. Also, if you are enjoying the story so far, it would mean a great deal to me if you starred it. Also, I will be keeping any author notes at an all-time low to maintain a steady story flow. Have questions? Feel free to comment or PM me!

Frustrated Kia's disaster jobs lose importance when Irdaktin tells her she has a Gift to save his colony.

(OH HOLD) A young girl named Soon traveled miles and miles with nothing but herself, a thick coat, and her pack. All too find a dragon. Instead she found warriors from a neighbouring kingdom, who kidnapped and killed anyone who dared venture near the cave. Soon was one of the unlucky ones who was captured, and prepared to be killed. (FIRST DRAFT)

Golden Freddy/Goldie wonders endlessly looking for something..or someone...but is it really what there looking for?

[Completed] [Editing/Re-Writing] [10/9/19] For hundreds of years Natasha and the rest of her village have been prisoners within their own town, their own homes, as a punishment for what she believes was a failed revolution attempt against their unjust rulers. Men and women over the years have disappeared without a trace for disobeying the rules of the Guards, the mysterious figures who enforce their imprisonment. To Natasha, the imprisonment seems unlikely to end, until the night she almost becomes the next victim. Coming face-to-face with a Guard, Natasha fully expects to lose her life, but instead escapes the confines of her village with her entire world turned upside down. Everything she had been told growing up, all the stories she had heard as a child, everything she believed, was a lie. Now free of her village, Natasha is determined to find out the truth and save her village, no matter the cost.

Jade's brother is kidnapped and taken off to a far away land where dragons, witches, bandits and a great Sorceress keep house. Why do they want Jade's brother, and will Jade be able to rescue him before something terrible happens to him? The goal is to update every day through the month of November, each update between 1,000-2,000 words long, but, we'll see. Note: If the book isn't finished before the end of November, I will continue posting every day until it's finished.

Years before there was the Seventh Realm series.... There was an atrociously bad stand-alone with no direction for its life.

These are some things about me. This is literally the first thing I have ever written on Wattpad, so I hope you like it! If you don't like it, don't even tell me WE REACHED #6 IN #firstdraft AND #57 IN #aboutme ! - Feb 29, 2024 WE REACHED #4 IN #allaboutme ! - Mar 2, 2024

Amylin Parker. A hopeless romantic girl who has zero experience but full knowledge about crush, love, relationships whatever..you name it. Now, why is she inexperienced? That's simply because...? But just a small walk to the nearest park changed the whole plot and now she really started to actually wanting to experience in "you-know-what" ;) (NO... DON'T THINK ANYTHING DIRTY GOSH!! I just meant to say crush or one side love and then to the relationship stage.) What happened during the walk?? A boy !!! Not just any boy... It's Jeremy Anderson. That boy happened. Now will the 20yr old hopeless romantic girl be able to gain experience ? Because she,for sure, knows that theory doesn't help in love... It's unique for everyone and everytime. To all the unanswered questions till now.. read and find out yourself :) (My first time trying to write something... Cringe warnings... mAyBeEee -(‾.‾"-) . . . update: once or twice in a week

The tale of a two. A world divided by race and held together by the threat of war. The four kingdoms of Syrus struggle to gain power over each while under the watchful eye of the Church. For hundreds of years this uneasy peace has separated the four races and kingdoms. A single quest for a princess to return home home will lead her to chance meeting with a young boy. This meeting will shape the very future of the world.

enemies to lovers, slowburn, angst... it's everything romantasy entails. I will love anyone who reads my description (but will also love you if you don't because do you really need to read the description if it's enemies to lovers???) Loki tries sneaking out of Asgard to confront the person who'd seemingly ruined his life-but a woman who believes that he had a hand in ruining her own life hijacks the operation, leading him astray under the influence that she can solve the same issue and set things back to relative order. He doesn't believe her for one second though, planning on abandoning her and taking back his ship, but something underneath all of the stubborness and aggravation keeps him from leaving every time he tries. He just can't figure out what it is about her. THIS IS A FIRST DRAFT- I would really appreciate critique/suggestions :) Can be interpreted as both Loki/Sigyn or Loki/Sylvie - it doesn't really matter because it's set in the MCU pre-Avengers and they are (obviously) separate people. ***I don't own the rights to these characters as it is a fanfiction and do not intend on making any profit ***fanfics, twists, fanart allowed - please credit me if reposted; I worked very hard on this

By Kayla Michel Cassie Miller never expected Peter Woods-the quiet new kid with sad eyes and a crooked smile-to become her everything. What starts as a simple friendship soon turns into stolen glances, midnight confessions, and the kind of love that feels like forever. But forever doesn't always last. Told across the months that changed everything, Almost Us is a bittersweet story about first love, growing up, and the slow ache of falling apart.