Idk-lol Stories

Jordie Wrenner walks the streets of New York while being drowned in the chaotic swell of his mind. With madness enchroaching on him, will he snap? Or will he overcome the demons inside him? Some personal feedback: - I think the start of the story is really good and I'm satisfied with it - While writing it I lost most of my progress so I had to re-write the second half of the story which may have caused quality to go down -Also never writen a discription/blurb for my pieces of writing before so don't expect them to be good :/ I wrote this for my English teacher as part of an assignment. I thought it was pretty cool, and my sister encouraged me to put it out there, so here I am. English isn't my main subject by any means, and I don't often write, but when I do, I enjoy it. I am more science-based, so please don't tear me up in the comments. I would appreciate any feedback.

"Jaslyn's life was simple. She went to school. Most days, she worked. She'd go home to hide from the world. She was a regular girl... that was until her life got flipped by a few boys, a few girls, and one cool, rebellious sister. *dreamy and hopeful music plays* Will her awesome, hot younger sister help love bloom in her life? Or will Jaslyn continue living a sad, boring, unexciting-" *music gets shut off* "Aliona! Quit lying to strangers! And stop trying to narrate my life! They can read the book and find out"