Jujube Stories

I was forced to write a jujube story for school and I think it's pretty good but I'd like feedback please.

Joestine will be writing the story with me. Beth was a nurse at a senior care home. One day when Mr. Walkers doesn't come out of his room for a while Beth peeks in to make sure he isn't dead, and that was the worst mistake of her life.

MANILLA ADOPTS A CHILD FANFIC | Eden Thomas lives with her Father, Who has only Recently got fired from his job. Unable to take all the pressure, from being a Single father, having to take care of a 10 Year old daughter, WITHOUT any money now, unable to pay the bills. Without 5$ In his name, He gives up and Sends Eden away to an Orphange ( Adoption place?) Eden, Too, gives up and understands where her father is coming from, But cannot help to cry and beg her father to stay. Manilla is a 30 Year old Drag Queen, to which the only thing keeping her together is The help of her roommates. After a few years, She still morns over the death of our Dear Sahara Davenport. ( Rest In Peace Gurl💙) She decides she needs Someone else in her life.. Someone who will be there for a long time.. who will make her smile in the dampest of moments.. That person just happened to be Eden.. Read - Comment - Vote!✌🏽💎 Love yall!