MurugiKinyua
Murugi... that is a stunning opening. It's poetic, haunting, and instantly immersive. The voice of Bella already feels layered - someone who's been through a lot, but still has soul and insight to offer.
Here's a slightly refined version that keeps your tone intact but adds a bit of rhythm and polish for that first-page impact:
I guess everyone has a safe haven.
But what happens when that haven is no longer safe?
When it becomes the very place you need to escape?
Maybe it's a home, maybe it's a moment.
Maybe it's a space inside someone else.
And maybe - just maybe - you realize your first love was never a person,
But a place.
The mystery goes on.
But really, what would life be without a little chaos?
Uncertainty, tears, smiles...
And sometimes, just sometimes, false giggles to survive it all.
Hello. My name is Bella - and this is my story.
Would you like help crafting the next part - like a flashback, or maybe a scene that sets the tone for Bella's world?