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guys i require your brains for my new story that i want to write

I am a Young writer in need of feedback. This is a small outcut of the book that I'm writing! Would apreciate if you read it and give me feedback! I want to develop my writing, and it is derefore important for me to know if my book seems interesting and what could be better!! ;)

She is broken, can't take life anymore, she needs something, happiness, feeling so empty. maybe this will help.

Pretty self explanatory. Don't be afraid to comment! Constructive criticism entirely necessary!

I don't really know what to put here because it pretty much says it all in the title, but this is just so you guys can leave comments about certain things. Like leaving a suggestion about a story idea or a few things you might like the story to include. Please click on this, because I really want ideas and your opinions/thoughts on certain things.

High-Tech Laser Guns. Time Travel. The Coolest Spaceship Ever. What else could you ever want? Blake is a person from the year 2039. When he realizes his father is a Chronowarden, he is shocked. His mission? To take his missing father's place and stop time from shattering. Highest Ranking: #308 in Science Fiction