Scenewriting Stories

I started writing scenes based on how I envision them with the song. I send these to my mates to see what they think of them but I want more opinions I've put some trigger warnings but I'm sorry I haven't gotten round to putting a tw on all of them that need it.

H hi! I'm doing this to try and get more emotional scenes and character building along with conflicts. Enjoy!

In my Creative Writing class at university, the professor gave us a short ~200 word writing assignment with the following prompt: Write a short scene (200 words) in which you move back and forth between two "fields of action." By "action" I mean description of setting (background) and character (foreground), internal (thoughts of character) and external (dialogue). All four of these might be spliced with a narrative. They should work together to build a robust "scene" in which an emotion or idea is presented indirectly.

scene is from attack on titan season 4, episode 16. spoiler warning for you guys!