Sentencing Stories

This is a fictional story of a man's (Barry) first day in prison and an altercation that occurs. This will be a part of a larger novel of mine that I am working on. Please give any honest feedback whether it be word choice, formatting, or if it's difficult to understand what's going on. Message me to talk about anything that you think could be approved. Thanks, and I hope you enjoy it.

True to love there is always betrayal. Betrayal is to love as Boy is to Girl. Or in this case Vampire is to Woman. The Queens favorite has betrayed the Crowned prince. The favorite was forced to leave her beloved at the alter, for reasons unknown. It was a trust broken on their wedding night, the night before enternal bliss was to take place. There is a very very dark reason behind her innocent face.