Storytest cerita

My mother said, Don't rub the salt on the wound. It only make it worse. "The only way out, I saw the light. As it become brighter and shiner. Now is the day I come out from the darkness, but, the more I saw the light, the one I loved will always faded and then transparent. The one who survived will be the one who faced the reality, which its funny to hear. And now, where am I?" I wondered as I walk find the light. "Ah, this dream again..." I hesitated as I shut my eyes. "The hand of darkness? No, The hand of guiltiness wrapped my body. It cold.... Ah- I lost my way to light. No worry, it will always happen... I end up, rub my own wound with salt." I chuckled. ~ו-•×~ "HON! HON!" The hon make me jumped, as I turned my head over the road, seeing a truck speed-over down hill and gonna hit me. "AAAAHH!" I scream on the top of my lungs.

What this will be is a story test to see how you guys like this. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM WILL BE APPRECIATED!! I'd love to know what you guys think I could do to fix the story or/and Make it more interesting.

The story is about a girl named Rose with several mental issues (she has a slight depression and she is self-harming). One day she met a famous ice skater Seung-Gil Lee and things got even worse... Hey people! This is my first story, don't judge- well...please don't hate because I'm shipping my character with a gay, taken character- it's a joke between me and my friends