Breaking Logic.

Breaking Logic.

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'I must have blacked out, because I opened my eyes to light, gazing up at my best friend, Kobi Welch. My vision was still a little blurry, but I could tell it was him right away with his almost white Blonde hair. "You okay?" He asked. My vision cleared up. "Yeah.I'm fine." I lied. "You really had me worried there." Kobi helped me sit up. "What was that?" "What was what?" "That...Thing. And the dark." I stammered. "What are you talking about?" He asked. "The dark. Didn't you see it? And that thing..." "I don't know what you're talking about." "Never mind." I sighed.' Have you ever had this feeling that your best friend knows something you don't? I've been getting that a lot lately. I'm not sure why, but he's been acting more and more suspicious... What is Bree's best friend hiding from her? Is it just guy stuff? Or is he keeping a secret that is the difference between life and death? I'd REALLY like some feedback for my writing, guys! REALLY appreciate being judged by total strangers c:
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